on me too quick.

one-on-one.

his arm away.

Then he raised his arms to push her back

unless you’re too chicken

his side’s numbers

golf-like swinging arc

the harpoon’s handle

Pretty vicious fight!

as a small Also you don’t need “as he spoke” at the end of the sentence .

Alan was too close

get too far away.

slashed at Alan’s middle

CHange the last sentence to: I was wondering if you could still impress me!

Take out the first “soon”. its too redundant

Pheonix is spelled wrong

Ooo creepy! Good descriptive fight scene

Ooo! Great suspense to lead into the next chapter[img=update]

Lisa is a great capitalist! Can’t wait to see how she gets the Gang

Good negotiator! Lisa acts like a pro at business