change the title and synopsis the readers will be twitching expecting something but in reverse like expecting starship as a main world due to the synopsis but due to the lack of chapters in the main world the expectations turned confused of sort 😅 in turned into just a game scenematic from gameplay with a self insert

nah , the whole story is focused on Warhammer 🥴 while the rest are fast forward type log chaps Warhammer as mainworld since it consistent of the chapter while the rest world only contians few chaps Just Warhammer fanfic , the system

this is literally just Warhammer story telling it's more entertaining to just play it 🥴the main world is Warhammer starship troopers and the rest are fast-forward logs scene just contains few chaps

i was expecting starship troopers world and the rest are extra spice tech procurement you should change the title 🧐 the novel in a more appropriate cause this novel contains almost all Warhammer so far while the starship troopers as main world was treated as fast word type I'll change my review once i readt it whole I'm currently at the half its not it's not bad the title turn it bad

so far all self insert character was made to die upon reading this fanfic and its like im reading a detective type of novel plus a glimps of the reinactment

hope this isn't a face slapping novel and has too much fast forward like the some silly cn fanfic

🤦 those joke are spoken by a true lunatic

few chapters and I'm getting sick of how the story play out getting stronger with no importance is a boring life full of hurdles

....... lack luster first few chapters and i lost interest 😑

being a gay is hellstuck up , wouldn't be able to contribute in a gene pool that's there end line even if your rich /poor so long as you're gay which unable to reproduce then your out from science and religionfor muslim it's religious beliefs respect

it's literally immoral 😂 you can't sugar coated such thing think about it if your a male or even a female for now since your in your teens its fine but think about it if you turned into a mother or a father either era of man values are degrading as we speak due to this kind of reading material or phrase 😑🤤😂🤣

🤤 oh this smells Racist stuff let's read some more before i bash this novel 😁

I'm expecting HOPE that can influence a readers on a good side not some trash

yeah i know pal 😑 loved halo series i can stomach the creation of spartan 2 , but creation of spartan 3 🥲 i can't but i love the plot btwi was just wishing spartan 3 soldier gets to be spared and equiped at least in fanfic giving them chance for survival

there's no disposable soldier only disposable commander and thats a commander who only sit on his desk without giving priority to the safety of his men

😑 good thing this is just fanfic , or game related idiotic commander he is if a commander can't provide enough protection for his army then he is but a trash, deploying ill equiped soldiers in a battlefield is the biggest mistake in war

good reader , a criticism with guidelines and substance not of which is very common of today a hypocrite reader who reads free novel and criticize a novel like a troll without guides one of the few good commentor 👍

🤦 seriously am i seeing this hypocrisy of criticism in a novel which is literally free i probably approved of criticism like chorus have below because it has substance but you my friend is a funny one 😂🤣write your own free novel will be the judge plus make it free

ops sorry 🤔 my bad i thought your one of those hypocrite reader but upon rereading and viewing your logs and retracing the comments threads 🤦 you aren't that fella who put memes

Hi author my advice in regards to people who commented on you harshly without helping is ignore them there 3 types of reader 1. hypocrite - all they know is to criticize the book especially the novels that are free ( except for novels that has racism ,drug promotion sort of stuff)2. good reader/mentor - those who criticize you and suggest good output example of this are the people who suggested using apps (then again in the long run you would eventually learn how to properly construct , just take your time )3.humble reader - people who learn to adopt and reconstruc your novel through the mind even if its incorrect btw 🤔 becareful religion, racism , politics , oh additional children it taste bad involving dying kids on a story