Tl;dr : overall i like it. The beginning is good but too long. Some part in the middle are not well done and boring but other part are near perfect. The universe is well built but some part are inconsistant or missing imo (partly for futur project ?), the end is completly rushed. The author is really good for writing some "sad part" of his story but more "epic situation" are needed. Teasing for futur event is too much (like "this decision may change the rest of all living being") and i think the author forgot some. Author need to better think on the balance of the story, and write the storyboard at the beginning. (Spoiler : "adopted baby", Ark with the monarch "ok good luck, we leave, bb", the end complelty rushed. You can't do that man) BUT for a first novel it's a really good start with lot of thing to improve.

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sry but my editing don't work on phone... try to fix that later

I have a theory.author : diabolic eggplant with just one book. eggplant : "They looked like goose or chicken eggs, which led to the name “eggplant." maybe "diabolic easter egg"Title : "Museum of..." : Museum is for conservation of data (futur)1st chapter : "Lin Jin slapped Xiao Huo on the head.Just then, Lin Jin felt pain as if a lightning bolt exploded in his brain, crackling loudly. In an instant, a radiant light shone from his head. In the midst of Lin Jin’s astonishment, he hears a chorus of roars and howls of a thousand beasts, drumming in his ears, followed by the melody of cries and chirps of bugs and birds, lightly strumming his heartstrings.A light flashed before him, the clouds dispersed and a white jade hall appeared with a stone tablet at the entrance that read ‘Museum of Deadly Beasts’ : Stone tablet at the first chapter and it was the action of slapping xiao huo who triggered the museum...1st chapter too : Status: "Heavily injured with three hidden injuries which are..." "Lin Jin had no idea how this guy managed to stay alive until now"Curator : we think about museum but can have other definition like "tutor for disabled person" (like when an apocalist come)Daojun : can be like "the dao" (equal) (not sure, read on internet dictionary)We can think of an immortals who try to solve the problem and think he is strong enoughLinjin : can be like "present choice" (not sure) like no more immortals can solve that, give that to a beast.Chapter 436 : Lin jin see the dao mask who is near the same and lin jin really look identical to Daojun in his opinion.I dont find where but i remember that he try to remember something and can't do it.There is some similarity with the disciple of daojun and the actual person in the visitation hall too (too late for search).At the final chapter " Young friend is use at the end and when he comeback from 7 years on the land for searching stone".We learn that the mortal layer is forbidden for immortals too.The ennemy fused with the saint, we learn stone can do that. We learn that with equilibrium it's ok.So my theory is that the immortal emperor was a cunning man and fused with a rank 8 beast voluntary or not and achieved rank 9. He lose sanity and aim just at immortals by instinct. He is equally strong at the law of heavens and he is an abomination know as the immortal devouring beast.Lin jin transmigrated (no mention saying dying) two times. He lose on daojun but win on lin jin (last sentence in real world) with Xao Huo who is certainly part of transmigation too or time travel.The last sentence is for lin jin who don't know if it was real or not.So lin jin is probably in the mortal layer many years later. Beast and immortals are certainly in the other layers now (he love to be a mortal, love the heavens). He saved the world and they want to let him know.He can't stay, or we can say that there is no more dialog because the museum comeback to the stone (He think about that near the beginning "maybe the museum can be retake" or something like that). And the only one who survive to that is the saint with a body cultivate since a very very very long time.

My rating is not my real feeling but i'm not here for unmotiving the author. I was in search for good VRMMORPG novel. I find 2 promising but not many chapter so i came here. General point of view review : - I think Writing is average at best for English people, it's okay for me because it's not my language but too many careless mistake (missing letters, inversed letters etc.). The updating frequency and stability seems good. Some good moment. Personnal point of view : I like pve oriented novel, it's more pvp (but more mixed than other well know of this type) I don't like WTF real world background : it's a level higher than "thief who..." The Character design and world background is good for the ingame part but must be better if less rushed. All this is not enough for me to drop it but... 1/ Story development is too fast, really really too fast. 2/ Author listens too much to comments No, you can't let decide the comments which spell the MC must take in the next chapter. No, you can't name an Emperor "Cervantez91" for a gift. No, you can't say "let the plot develop, i'm an author i have plan" and the next chapter you "drop" (author word) a fan service explication chapter because comments are burning... Stop thanking people or complain (for an objectif lose) or giving ultimatum (for a bonus) at each chapter. We may think you do that for the minimum number of character....... Yes, my review is a bit rough but remember my first sentence. I think the author can do better (some idea are really good/original, just need a (better) story development plan), an editor ( check the easy mistake at minimum) and we can see that the motivation is here just need a more professionnal approach. I drop for that, sorry.

I share the same opinion for many novel. "Oh a reincarnated MC 10 years before", "Oh a useless boy who is doted with a system" "Oh a MC with the poorest talent going to live a life of trash, Oh wait, this is not the poorest talent but the more powerfull one" etc. but i like some of these story because the writing is good (not poor, not too much for exceed the light novel range) or/and the storyline is good or/and the author work on the psychos of the differents characters or/and the world background is good or/and the joke are good. etc. But i'm able to differentiate thing. I can drop some novel know are "one of the best" for many people, i know they are really good but not to my taste. There is no need to take out the sign "i'm not a pro reviewer" and the other sign "subjectivity". Don't post a critic or just give à 4.5 and explain it's not to your taste. You can find many worst novel here if you just want to trashtalk.

I was wondering why there is no more good VRMMORPG Novel ongoing. Moonlight sculptor is finish, waiting for a trad for taming master, so Overgeard is the only and real good one ongoing... I just find 2 new VRMMORPG with a good potential, and this one is in this two. I'm sure the author know the 3 novels above and i hope he can find an interessting original story. For the moment we can say "it's really good but a little "déjà vu"" but it It's just the beginning and it's better than most of the others VRMMORPG ongoing so give it a try and thank to the author for his work. PS : The only bad thing is the number of chapter release each week, drop the other novel ! [img=update]

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The "too much luck" is present since the beginning...

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same note for me :D

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Not read. I am bad at grammar etc. because english is not my language but please use punctuation a little more.

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Do you best :D

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My first reading on "cultivation type LN/Dongua". The best in cultivation drawn version (cause most of the others are shit). A good one for novice who want to try this type.

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