that's my girl right there

yep, I saw it coming.

This is where you know she's madly in love and she's going to fall into depression soon lol

Most of the sentences are to show character interactions and help somewhat in character development. I try to make the paragraphs as short as possible but I'll try to shorten them more. Also, everything becomes better the more indepth you read. Thanks for the review, it helps me become better as a writer 😊❤️

I'm assuming that's a good thing 😂

sure.

I don't think I need to say anything tbh lol, this is jksmanga's book so it deserves the 5 stars. He's one of my favorite authors.

Smooth writing.

use better punctuations

Descriptions and wordings need a bit more work.

what's with the comma?

Thank you max 🥂

yep

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This is a true gem. The synopsis and the cover doesn't do justice to it though, I suggest you update it to give it more traction.

While the plot is nice and all, you could do better with your story telling. A whole lot better.

onwards

cliche

moan in pain?