Well, I usually do reviews when I get past chapter 20 or a good part of an arc, but I'll do this one in a different way more like telling you the things I liked. Well, Farid is very good as a protagonist so far, you've built him up very well it's quite refreshing that he's a kid and his acting is consistent with the kids in the world of one piece, how he learned with trial and error about the system. Speaking of the system, I don't see it as bad, it would be really bad if the protagonist knew everything about the world and they would let him buy things instead of increasing his basic stats, it's pretty balanced so far. Although we have to see at what level of power he is with just a little accumulation if his 500 stats in both parts only put him at the level of a Luffy at the beginning of the adventure, it would be quite balanced. I know it's not all stats and that there are combat techniques and all, that he'll have to learn during the journey and even who knows how to consume a devil fruit. I have seen that you have not planned so far to make Harem or not, here is a tip from a reader who enjoys the FF; It is easier to write simple romances than Harems, the story loses its north when you try to write several romantic plots in a coherent way, and if you do it carelessly to go quickly to another romantic subplot it will look bad and incoherent. Also you don't necessarily have to make the MC touch a woman in the whole story, we are not in the middle ages where romance is sacred, you can make him have vibes with some girl in the play but nothing dramatic like Twilight. So far it's a pretty refreshing play in concepts and it doesn't seem like the character is going to break right away, although I still don't know the real extent of his power, even the MC doesn't know the real extent of his power, right now he could be a Mini Kaido and he wouldn't know it (In terms of stats). I hope it won't be drugged and that more people will see you, since you are in the ff rank of a month.
Well, I almost never do synopses but this fanfic has earned it. Grammar: It is one of the few times I see a work with a characteristic stamp of the author, you can see a clear style that is maintained during the chapters. Although I have to clarify that I read several chapters with a translator (There's nothing like reading in your native language) 5/5 Updates: I can't say much, but it appears that he has published 33 caps continuously for 15 days, so I will rate this section well, 5/5. Story development: It's great that you have chosen a character that was not reincarnated because it makes you flow with the story and puts a more realistic parameters for the MC to act, not every MC likes to save a person just because it's a character from a series he saw in his past life. About the parameters, you respect them in a great way during the chapters the MC detaches himself from the school characters in a natural way for the reason that he is going to leave. Although I have to point out that some interactions are pretty forced like telling Lydia to act like her real self when she's barely known her for 4 days, taking this conversation specifically but there are quite a few examples between Myr and Lydia's conversations. Character Design: About Myr, I've read quite a few criticisms that pointed him out as the typical weak Nerd that can't do anything, I disagree in a big way with this typecasting of Myr, it is true that he is quite weak physically speaking, but all that hides a brave MC, intelligent and a person with a big heart with his close ones, but a vengeful and spiteful person with the people that hurt him and quite vicious when doing his revenge. Although he is intelligent he is not the typical ff know-it-all, this character learns during the chapters as with Hannah's situation, although yes, he fails a few times when dealing with Jackson, I still think why Myr didn't ruin his life by getting the recordings of the beating, although it is true that it brought him more benefits than disadvantages to use Jackson. 4/5 world design: This FF is based on the TV series Teen wolf, a series that I personally followed until the fifth or sixth season 5 years ago, so I do not remember much of the general context of the series, all that did not prevent me from enjoying the mysterious world of Teen wolf again, the author poses the world of this series as if it were a completely new world and we are raising the necessary information in advance without presuming that all who read the FF know everything about Teen wolf 5/5
it, Remember that English does not handle genders in things.
Very good chapter, Renzo I think he is making a mistake, it is understandable that he will go alone, at the end of the day he gave his life, but leading an Elite Brigade and one of the pillars like Irelia is already overdoing it, I quite understand Leader and Zed, out of nowhere one of your pillars leaves by will and also convinces another pillar to leave, that is an unawareness of the importance that he has and irelia has in the resistance, in addition to not paying attention to the enemies What is he doing, with what he said he won Zed as an enemy and the funniest thing is that he knows how powerful he will become and that precisely a murderer with mobility is his counter, if he only said that he needs a time out for psychological reasons and that he would seek more allies by orders of Lady Janna, this would make Zed not take him as a traitor and would leave the doors open for him to return and help a little. I'm not saying that this mistake bothers me, but I like that MCs have mistakes since they are human and although this move made him win over an enemy and negatively affect the Resistance, we also saw our MC follow his heart and mind. in addition to finally thinking of himself for the first time of what is about Fan fic
Well, this is the first time that I find a work so well done ... but hey I will continue to qualify with the standards of a fan fiction: Writing Quaility: objectively I cannot judge this section since I use a translator, although I am still impressed that it is one of the few works with which I have found a more complete and elegant vocabulary, in addition to such polished writing and narration, from this I can say that the author has the skills of a writer of books from some good publishing houses. Stability of uptades: I think it is more or less a weekly chapter, if it were a common fan fic the publication rate would be poor, but counting the quality and length of the chapters it seems to me more than good. Story Development: With only one arc, it has shown to have a good construction of the story in general plans, it seems quite good from many points of view, in addition to playing with the POVs and changing the story to your liking but without going over the lines of the work, although it has some details that screech, such as the fact that several characters think things that they did not think before, for example in the case of the Maximoff brothers, some members of the Avengers saw them as boys who were lost in life, even after working with a Terrorist cell and helping Utron, but then Ultron meets them again and out of nowhere almost all the Avengers begin to suspect the Maximoffs, it also happens with the case of Ultron, Stark is understood That he is not psychologically well and that he suddenly changes his mind, but the author I think that he used that resource a lot without leading to many things, he left matters unfinished or left them in the air, Ulton calling Stark father, Ultron's speech to Friday of what he truly is, I have even Pepper's talks that go nowhere things that would be very good plots but leaves them in the air. But in general terms, he plays with something that few authors do, he talks about philosophical and psychological issues, he plays with AI and the limit between machine and human, few fanfiction authors have gotten into these issues as well as this one, which gives a fresh air. to the topics that are usually touched on in Marvel fan fics. Character Design: Here the author shines and for a long time, as I said, one of the topics he touches is psychology, because thanks to that he gets to touch layers of some characters in a sublime way in addition to not being afraid of getting into the minds of the characters And to elaborate, where do you see this is the AIs, Ultron is extremely well done, although he still has problems, since it is not known how he really is, is he the first Ultron child who adopted Stark characteristics? Or is it the mature Ultron who was seeking peace and introspection, with fear and hatred of being handled? Well, it is never clarified in the first arc, obviously I know that Ultron during that time Ultron is being influenced by the stone but it does not remove the fact that Ultron's changes are so abrupt and picturesque that you do not know that Ultron was an act or what really it is. The fact that these changes happen seems very good to me, it is one of the few times that I see such an introspective and well done character, psychologically speaking, but the author treats some of these issues above and leaves them in the air. But by far it is one of the works that has best handled his characters. World Background: The world where things happen is quite well done, the things that happen in the work have palpable consequences in the world, this is already quite solid, also it is not locked in the United States, but it explores other countries and borders not leaving the Avengers to a single national event without influence in other countries, the first arc has not yet finished and consequently all the consequences that Ultron has caused have not yet been seen, but there have already been flashes that the author does not leave these things called "consequences" forget
How bad is webovel setting word limits and cutting words without warning, at least you get to understand my point.
Writing quality: Well, since I use a translator to translate into my mother tongue, I wouldn't know how to give you a rating, but I suppose it's okay, since you're quite descriptive, in fights you're ok, you know how to put a construction and continuity in fights, I highlight The fight against Enigma, which is quite decent, I put 4 stars because I cannot give an exact judgment due to the fact that I read the fanfic in translator, that's why I give a star for the margin of error. Stability of Updates: It's pretty good, a daily chapter, the only thing I miss would be to put Chapter Packs like 5 chapters in a day or something like that, but outside of that the chapter cadence is pretty good, a 5 stars in this department. Story Development: This is quite good, the beginning of the plot as Born and grows seems tremendous to me, that they give us their motivations in the first chapters is quite good, although they are lost and are not clear in some stories. What I like most about this work is how the MC acts with the world and its members, how it is a motivation for Mihawk, a help for Katakuri and Kuzan, A rival for Kaido, a Kouhai for Whitebeard and Shaky, Each one of these relationships are understood and created in a good way and do not clash at any time. Also take a risk by making history in the time of Roger and Rocks, but use this risk is used to enrich this empty part of history by setting the Overlords that are goals and that have to be reached. Although there are Power ups that could be categorized as cliches and it gains part of its power with the system, when there are important advances it is noticeable that it is due to effort and time, the author does not tremble to prepare his MC with time skips and training , although if he has some other power or cliche but in general terms it is fine, for now the main character knows where he is and where he is going, he does not get stuck in the Rocks crew, he goes to the future, and that is very good, There are some gaps such as the fact that Enigma did not use Lilin to stop the MC, since she was owing him the Gigantization Serum, and at that moment Enigma would have told him that the favor was paid if he helped him stop Damian and Kaido. Character Design: this is one of the parts that I like the most about this work, as it adapts characters that have not come out almost like Rocks or OC characters like Enigma, They cause an impression and respect as the one that Rocks should give, he feels like the leader of a crew like the Rocks and Enigma feel the same way, command respect and behave like the person they are supposed to be, a powerful Overlord who has held his position for many years. About the MC, the character is constantly evolving, he does not stay stagnant and thinks about the future, when he does not correct his mistakes the world does, but he realizes his mistakes and tries to correct them, as when Rocks explained that not all can enter the crew, he was naive and realized and corrected it, The goals are from the first chapters since the author instead of making a first arc that focuses only on the evolution of power of the MC, made a arch that also raises and gives us to show the character of the MC. World Background: The creation of the world is very good, this is made based on the time of Roger and Rocks, a time already seen but little described in the manga and anime, he takes advantage of these gaps to enrich the world by his own hand, putting characters, Islands and settings of his own authorship, which do not seem out of tune with the world of One Piece, although there are some times that he conveniently uses that freedom to drive his characters, such as the supposed island of Death, but they are minor details. When these scenarios created by the author are where an important plot happens, they are endowed with a good description to the point where we can imagine the place with the same animation of the anime
What I mean is that using this plot in the first chapters would cause a very large impact in the world, so much that the rest of the plots will be affected, since Wonder Woman will be chasing the head of the protagonist as the warrior who is and everything that. Never show my rejection of this plot I only hope that your adaptation and planning will be good because this will strongly affect the world of DC, by the disappearance of one of the world's largest forces and the one in charge of the Defense of the planet against the gods. Since the plot started with the Gotham purge, which personally seems the best, since in the eyes of the public it will be seen as a hero that eliminated the villains and will not come back to torment them, very different if their first action is a Genocide of an entire group The heroes would like it like a madman at the level of Ras Alahul or Vandal Savage.
Well... For now he has done what he has promised, which is a work out of the community although personally there are some routes that I do not like as much as learning magic when you already have powers or vice versa but apart from that is all right. The MC has clear and concise goals, we are presented before reincarnating with these goals and reached the point of being influential in their world with these goals for which there is a feeling of continuity and that we are really seeing the same person But with skills and in another world. The scripture is what I like least, those dialogues as if they were scripts are little practical and annoying, this is a good tool for novice writers but it does not become part of the author's style I hope you change this little by little. On the design of the world, I think the author presents decently Gotham, but until there I can comment on this since he does not have many changes of Esténarios but presents the real danger that is to live in Gotham.
She would be an antiheroe, in general terms her goal is morally good but her methods are extreme, so much that you antagonize the heroes and normal people.
The theme of this option will be that it is going to be antagonized very quickly to the League of Justice, I do not know what plans you have with them or that you are looking to do with this group but this causes the whole league of justice this of the main character , even Wonnder Woman would come to hate MC. if this option was chosen I hope that the consequence is verified
This is for me the best that I have read, the MC is one of the few that I have seen so well done, although it is not known what things are made of stone and what others are from its base personality, although I think it is done appropriately by the author. The influence that he has caused in the world and in all the characters is one of the most coherent and one of the best that I have seen in a fan fic. I like how the play has evolved and separated from the original Age OF Ultron movie. The author has put philosophical and moral themes in all aspects of the work, which makes it unique among all the pile of all Fanfics, has given a shape to Ultron and the others with these new ideas. For readers who like works with introspection and who like a more exact psychology, they will really enjoy it.
When I have to give a spear in favor, I will give it, one of the recruits finally makes sense
Although I partially agree with what you say, this is a place to qualify a work, not to make psychological indications of the author, you did not give reason for the qualification, you only said the grammar above and then you worried about the author's psyche, If I were an author, I would delete it at once.
It is not because it is gore, but because of how badly it is posed and that it seems only actions without more than one character that has no motivations and only does it because yes, this type of actions only generates that you repudiate the MC, not because he is a villain but because it does a range of actions that any person repudiates and the only thing the author uses to argue is "he is psychopathic"
Again wrong, if you want a work to be good put everything you want but be coherent and argued, if you only do what you want without sense that they wire you a 2 stars will not be the worst thing you are going to receive ...
Friend, give enough reasons and the synopsis itself gives an idea of how the work is going to go: "A crazy man with a broken mind was executed and reincarnated in an alternate MCU. Let see where this goes." literally the only thing he is going to do is put a character who needs no excuses to tear the world of DC apart. And it is not only the Gore, but the Reasoning behind it, for example we can take Elfen Lied, it has a huge amount of gore and everything but the character does this type of action for some reasons that the reader can understand, but according to what I read it seems that he is only a Psychopath for no reason why he is, without evolution, without charisma and without a soul, just a puppet of the author's whims.
Something good you can do to improve is to try to write as if the world of the Fancic were yours, that is, the scenarios, Scenes and Atmosphere were of your own authorship and the only way to visualize it is with your description. just do not worry too much, many Fan fiction make this mistake since they are based on a world already raised, this is a difference between a writer and a Fanfic writer, the first poses a new world and the second is based on a world already existing but develop it to your own liking.
Please author give more desire to the argumentation of the actions of the characters, again a change of plans without meaning happens. Batman went with a plan against Noctis and also had WW with him, they simply agreed with a few words to Noctis's plan and they don't have the kind of relationship to accept everything. The worst thing is that he accepted in front of Diana that she was going to kill most of the Amazons and Diana left as if she had not heard that. I'm not saying that the twist is bad, but you raised it wrong, for example if you had given that Batman agreed to have more members of the JL and apply a raid plan to catch all the members of the MC group Author please be more argumentative, in the end Batman is not a madman and if you are going to handle characters like Thalia Al ghul or her father they also require this argument.