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The author decreasesthe intelligence of character to fit the rather forced plot. Out of nowhere the author also decided to include a pregnancy plot and nake Gwen pregnant and with everything I have seen till now I am 100% sure that the author is going to use the kid to milk needless drama for the sake of drama.
The writing quality of the fanfic is atrocious and I don't mean it grammar wise. What I mean is that the author tries to use philosophical quotes to fill word count and stretches a monologue from few sentences to entire paragraphs. The MC constantly uses quotes or talks about philosophy for no reason other than to seem like a deep-thinker/intelligent/wise and I can't believe I am saying this but it comes cringe worthy. The story is moving at glacial speed. If it was a slow-paced story I would be fine with it, but it is not. I read it till chapter 15. 3 noteworthy things happened 1. The mc transmigrated , 2. We had a little training montage and 3. The mc left the island. All of that took 15 chapters and 80% of the chapters were full of useless monologues where the mc tries to appear philosophical. All of the 'action' could have taken maximum of 3 chapters if you remove the useless monologues. What made me quit however was the fact that author pulled the cheapest nerf/plot-point/plot-device or whatever you want to call it by making the MC lose his FUCKING ARM. How? Well the mc's ship got attacked by a sea king and our 'smart' mc jumped from the side that the sea king was and lost his arm. This is quite possible the dumbest and forced thing I have seen in a while. Let me remind you the author filled the previous chapters with useless monologues to portray our mc as someone who is smart, has experience out in the wild, knows that he is in One Piece, which means he knows about the sea kings. So instead of training like he used to do in the 3 months that he was there and hunting fish for food and etc. He because of some bullshut timer that he doesn't know anything about makes off screen a boat and sails away knowing about the dangers of the sea and not preparing for them. AND Timer that I talked about before says that he has 1 YEAR and he only wants like 3 MONTHS before goes out to the sea while KNOWING about the dangers. After all of that the author expects us to believe that the MC is smart and is expert explorer or some BS.
Is that Rias from DxD? If yes which season?
Fire Mastery is combination of [ Fire Manipulation V ] and [ Purgatory Fire ]
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It is possible, because some haki users can detect intent or if they are being watched could find who watches them. That's why it is only possible to hide from a Haki user only if you are equally or more skilled in haki than the other user.
I will just list everything that is wrong with this fanfiction: 1 - The author doesn't know much about DxD, most likely has watched only parts of the anime and that isn't enough, because the anime for DxD slips a lot of things. 2 - The author tries to use complex words to discuss complex topics like philosophy and the like and he fails miserably. I had to re-read every chapter once or twice to understand it and even then half of what the author wrote doesn't make and isn't connected to the story. 3 - 70% of every chapter till now ( ch. 20 ) is useless word padding, monologues and ramblings of the MC that aren't connected, don't make sense and complete waste of time. 4 - The author jumps from scene to scene making it seem like the readers have missed something. An example of this is when we see the status screen of the MC of Solo Leveling( the system comes from here ), but we are not told that because it says that the system shows this screen and you need to read the comments attached to the paragraph to know that this status screen is about the MC of SL. Another example is the fact that the MC triggered some hidden quest and he needs to increase his some percentage based status bar and he almost dies but plot armor saves him then a day after this scene he can increase this status bar somehow. We are not told how he does it or how he can do that when he didn't know about this a day earlier. 5 - The author constantly changes the background of the MC. First he was orphan who became rich by himself, then it changed to something else. It changes for the 3rd time when he now is orphan who was lazy and someone who wasted his. 6 - The MC is a hypocrite filled with baseless arrogance, but in his monologues he is a normal person with morals. He isn't something special, but even though he has fragments memories and doesn't remember the plot of DxD he is sure that he can become strong as a human. The MC is constantly angry that he was transmigrated to DxD and wants to have revenge on the one who did it. Doesn't use the little knowledge he has before it becomes obsolete, doesn't try to establish connection with the devils even though his action make him very suspicious to them. Why? Well according to the MC he does all of these things, because the bwing that reincarnated him wants to use him as entertainment so he wants to make himself boring. He doesn't even consider the fact that ROB may erase him from existence. 7 - The MC is dumb. He uses almost all of his points to increase Strength. Why, because according to him Fallen Angel's can fly so he can't escape from them. Doesn't consider the fact that if they can fly he can't hit them so his Strength is useless. He doesn't increase his Stamina which he needs to use the Boosted Gear. On top of all that he wastes 5-8 chapters on his Sacred Gear. Which he doesn't use or try to increase his proficiency in, because he doesn't want to be dependent on it. Then why waste so much time trying to unlock it??? I can go on and on, but this I think is enough cor people to get the idea.
Think of ot like this. A Rune requires a minimum of let's say 10 Mana to work and can accept maximum of 100. It's power depends on the efficiency of the caster. What he is doing us throwing 1000 Mana at it and saying 'work', but the runes has maximum amount of mana it can utilize so it is not really powerful.
Author should change it to mental fatigue. And also should change mental energy to Magical energy, because while yes mental energy is how it's called in the LNs it is confusing for readers.
The author hasn't read the novel and is only using the wiki as a guide. The mc is a super genius that has somehow figured out how PoD works when even Akuja having hundreds of years hasn't. On top of that the power scalling is incorrect. Firstly Serafall is a SATAN class not ULTIMATE. Secondly the mc creates a gun that can be ranked at most Mid-Level Sacrd Gear, but somehow Serafall says it rivals High-Class SG and even some lower-class Longinous. Are you serious? The Longinous are fucking bugs. They give powers like Boosting, Dividing, Time Stop, Probability Manipulation ad etc. A gun that makes big explosions that can hurt even by author standards Ultimate class devils is not a Longinous even a low level one. The author himself even says to us that they work on concepts in previous chapters. The characters are also nerfed for plot conveniens. Serafall a Satan Devil can react at least at Mach 5000. That is at minimum. The author expects us to believe that somehow expects us to believe that she couldn't react to a magic circle that takes an ENTIRE SECOND to finish when she knows about Solomon. To give you an example of how powerful the 4 Satans are Sirzechs Lucifer has enough power to destroy an entire CONTINENT. Serafall while weaker can destroy MULTIPLE COUNTRIES. And the author tells us that a weapon that couldn't destroy a nation level barrier is able to kill her. Are you fucking serious?
First of all are we to believe someone who is in charge of an orphanage doesn't have enough self control that he would attack someone who he knows that he cant beat? Are we to believe that the MC who is reincarnated doesn't have enough mental stability to not cry when other children haven't? He goes from being devastated, crying and being disgusted by fate to being determined and going against fate to again believing in fate in the span of 3 paragraphs. You pretty much copied the entire system of Soul Land but changed the names. People cultivate with beast souls. There are 10 ranks and 100 levels to go up a rank you need to kill and eat the heart of a beast and they can drop beast tools and beast weapons? How is this not copying the Soul Land? You world is called BEAST LAND. Finally if I wanted attention I would write on some famous and actually good novel. Come of you high horse you are not the next Er Gen or something.
Hinata for life!!!