Just a note, the two different spellings of 'come' have very different meanings... When you write the cook 'cum' nanny it does not mean what you want it to. Unless you're writing a *** scene, stick to 'come.'

Just so you know "cum" is English slang for an orgasm or for the semen/fluid. I'm pretty sure you meant to say assistant 'come' secretary... You might need to think about using an editor, there are quite a few grammatical errors

Descriptions are long-winded and confusing. Writing is trying so hard to be good that it actually makes it less coherent and less engaging.

The writing is convoluted and difficult to follow. It feels like the author is trying to hard to make it seem "good" and so whatever they are trying to say gets lost