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NinjasEverywhere1yrCommentedIt’s The Prince Again…- NinjasEverywhere1yrCommentedAt any rate, this incident allowed me to understand my ancient will a tiny bit more. So I will need to try to keep better control over my emotions when I engage in battle, or I might end up losing my mind and turning to the dark side.
- NinjasEverywhere1yrReplied to Warmaisach
I will only mention something negative since i can't bother mentioning all the positives (which is a lot more). Imho, you use the name "Alex" way too often. Alex thought... Alex ran, Alex didn't, Alex wished etc.. Just count how many times you use his name in a single chapter. I would suggest you use 'he' or 'I' more often. And as he ran back... He thought that was all but... etc I couldn't believe my eyes... I wonder if thats... etc Instead of Alex couldn't believe his eyes, Alex wondered if thats... etc Just a tip from a reader, thats all. cheers
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So many red flags everywhere... sigh
"That's right," Rose continued, "the sect only accepts females, so we won't have to worry about any annoying young master tropes that'll cause us more trouble in the long run." - NinjasEverywhere1yrCommented
LIN FENG!
Damien nodded, hiding the slightly disappointed look in his eyes. 'It would have been fun to become Tian Long or Yang Lintian or something.' - NinjasEverywhere1yrCommentedCh 46 Circuits [1]
- NinjasEverywhere1yrReplied to Kido_TO
Yh true, but he can get this deal right now, probably without much risk, or he can try to maximize his benefits but with more risks probably. What if he gets robbed for example?
Samuel who was a little taken aback by her decisiveness had no idea what his work was worth in the first place. He didn't even know the worth of a hundred thousand spirit stones. But seeing the shocked reaction on Eva's face, it's must be a lot. Selling it right now would save him lots of effort and will immediately solve all his money problems. Feeling he could trust them, he decided to agree to her proposal. - NinjasEverywhere1yrReplied to Kido_TO
Because this was my first novel and more of a learning experience for me. Pls let me know what you liked and didn't like about this novel so I can learn for my next novel! Thank you!
It didn't take long for news to spread as in no time, from one village to the other, everybody heard about it. More and more people started visiting the village, they all wanted to see the miracle with their own eyes. After confirming the truth they started bringing in their sick and each and every one of them got healed, no exceptions! Thousands and thousands of people started to worship him. They prayed to the heavens for his good health and brought food and gifts to the village. They all wanted to meet him, curious to see this child blessed by the heavens, the boy behind the painting. - NinjasEverywhere2yrReplied to WillOblivionK
Hi, my apologies but I dropped this novel. This was my first novel and a learning experience for me. I dropped this because I wasn't satisfied with the story myself and it didn't really get much attention. Plus, I really really really wanted to write another story which I'm working on atm, but will only start releasing when I have a lot of chapters ready so I don't have to stress about release rates. I was writing this story as a complete amateur without any preparation what so ever and I made a lot of rookie mistakes and thats why I dropped it and take this learning experience with me while I'm writing the next one. Anyway, I'm really sorry but just can't find the motivation to continue this one.
- NinjasEverywhere2yrReplied to J0KER
Yes, exactly this.
He looked like he was 17 or 18, with eyes full of energy. His looks were very plain and ordinary, and he wore clothes made of rough cloth. At this moment, his sleeves were rolled up, and the hem of his pants was stained with dirt, just like a professional farmer. - NinjasEverywhere2yrCommented
well... mark my words, she is pretty and weak entering an accademy of psychopaths, what could possibly go wrong?
"Yeah, you look astounding," replied Grimm, feeling guilty of that stealthy glance. "Whoever has you as his wife will be the luckiest man in the world." He couldn't believe he had completed that sentence without a pause. - NinjasEverywhere2yrCommentedCh 51 Chapter 51 - Yesteryear (II)
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Chinese sure faint a lot lol.... I have never fainted once in my entire life.
Seeing Su Shangwen getting slapped by his mother, Tang Xiu was feeling extremely satisfied and couldn't resist laughing out loud, but the joy was short-lived. Tang Xiu's body on Earth was extremely frail, to begin with. The sudden return of his soul, the overwhelming sorrow and happiness in that short period of time, and coupled with the usage of the breathing technique from the Origin Ignition Art, which burns away the user's life force, had caused him to faint after merely three big laughs. - NinjasEverywhere2yrCommented
So, your own fault for having bad judgement.
Immediately after, just as he barely passed through the nine levels of lightning tribulation; when he was preparing to face the last wave of formless yet most dreadful tribulation—psychological-mental, and at the same time he began to undergo the first Demonic Tribulation, the very people—his several good friends who were supposed to protect him, launched a fatal strike towards him. - NinjasEverywhere2yrReplied to TechnoSpear
It's a prelude to power hiding, multiple identities etc, something I find unpleasant.
"No," said Aldrich as he thought about it for a second. "A mask." - NinjasEverywhere2yrCommentedCh 25 Shocking Changes
- NinjasEverywhere2yrReplied to NinjasEverywhere
Ohh and I would like to add that this is something personal, meaning that the novel is great in itself and of high quality but not something for me. For me it's too complex, to vague and mystical. I prefer easy reads where I don't need to think hard and do my best to understand what is happening... With time jumps, different POV's, lots of mysteries that are solved little by little over hundreds of chapters, a lot of characters that are all involved with the story line and all have their own set of mystery, and every question you ask everyone of them they all answer with vague and unclear answers, dreams that are real or not real or a combination of dreams, illusions, forebodings, different timelimes.... This is definitely not an easy read haha.
- NinjasEverywhere2yrReplied to kiwami803
Thats because what happend wasn't enough to trigger the sociopath button in your mind, now you missed your chance and will forever be shackled by emotions.
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And so, the world welcomed a new sociopath in their mids.
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