KearDarkfire

Not too sure why a lawyer is here. not like know if they even need to be or whatever. I just thought it would be a good idea

just noticed it was supposed to be the day after tomorrow and not the next day they would arrive

Devil's advocate here. Instead of indulging in there fantasy (we know what the truth is (or do we :p )), he is deflecting and putting some focus on the confusion she must feel. the changes she sees.

See in any other story, if she would info dump in universe, there would be some bad guy that would hear this immediately through some back story section and the plot.

Actually no, it shouldn't be that. He wouldn't believe her story that she is from another world. Self learned would be incorrect.

Other than some minor way things were worded, I like what I did there. Also from their perspective Saranie would be disassociating from reality. In her own (logic) from their perspective.

Saranie moved super duper fast to flee. But how did she not flee faster than this kind of information. You could say magic, probably right in this case. But there is no way it could be by horse.

I think so Past Me

I cant remember how old he is. I can't remember how many times I changes his age throughout this story. But having some kid, lose out his early years of his future dedicating himself to his brother and family is a painful thing. Something both him and his parents know he shouldn't have to make.

Same, I forgot about that too. I think I was trying to add traits my characters early on. Something to spice up the characters. This might have been a throw away line. However I do think that when writing these stories, I was actually able to develop these MCs better than what I originally wanted