Ok... I read my work after the blackout from the writing and found many shortcoming in the story. So I thought why not review my own work. So far I think the pace of the story is good.. comedy felt good except for some cringy part. Grammar is ****ty with lots of substance missing. Characters are pre established in Canon and no major changes except for ocs. Overall I think it's ok for just casual reading. I think I can except it as passable for my first story.