NielS

Okay. You got it Ace pal. Yours is a very good system story. I'm just wondering why you mass release your chapters in a day. Anyway, you must have lots of stockpile to do that. I'm sure once readers started reading this book, they cannot help but browse till the last chapter you have in here. That's why I ask why you mass release it.. You should keep a little for suspense. [img=recommend]

I also did pal, but you know...readers sometimes they don't want to be burden on re-checking those, (though some reader's did, that is If you hook them in your 1st three chapters.) But the thing is, if they're lazy enough to that, it is easy to just dump our book and read others. And it is us, writer's responsibility to hook them in reading our books by giving them whole immersive story so they could invest emotion on our MC or side characters... bad or good emotional investment to our MC or antagonist is still an investment. That makes our readers continue reading our story. I'm no expert pal, I just based my own way of evaluating on what i read. You may also check the academy in the inkstone. It sure help us.

Thanks pal. I will take note of it. I admit sometimes I get carried away by my writing, and overlook some details. I highly appreciate your thought on this.

Pal, first your story needs lot of polish works to do... the grammar and the sentence. I understand that the readers cannot see a good story flow since it's just 2 chapters....I just based it in the synopsis, since there is one there. You already have an idea how your story flows. And a swordmaster MC with magical ability is always one of my favorite. Now, I suggest, you need to have a good opening chapter and a little explanation from the MC why he quits his job after he had hospitalize and why he decides to go to capital after... maybe his thoughts of what he's going to do there makes your readers understand about your MC. You can still improve this by reading other books from our fellow writer. That's all I can say for now.

Oh..dear. Elaris needs my John MC.. He's awesome, witty and of course handsome.

So, Elaris is not the Shadow Queen? It's her granny throne ghost... Hmmmnn...

Can she ask her granny throne ghost to just give her like magical power...or something, instead of adding fuel to the fire.

This royal politics is sickening. I hope Elaris will become like another Morgana thing and hung those brothers of her in the gallows. [img=disgusted]