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UnsympatheticMoron

UnsympatheticMoron

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Jason Beck, just Jay or Beck is fine.

2019-11-12 JoinedUnited Kingdom
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Posted

    The story is part of a larger discourse on substance abuse and the hypermasculine culture of toxicity that has gripped society. Put in that context, with regard to the nuances of social issues pertaining to "working out" and "martial arts training", there is a clear indication of the author's brilliant understanding of the underpinnings of toxic masculinity and competition. Although it is written in the form of a fun story, it makes no claim of its own humourous nature, taking itself seriously and yet playing with these very complex elements in a very elegant and enjoyable manner. The expressions used, the phrases, indicatives and their qualifiers, all merge into an amalgamation that makes itself culturally relevant to the average reader on this site/app. This reveals the quality of the writing to be more than satisfactory. The author needs to work on three things: 1. Fleshing out the world and the characters. 2. Making the narrative more coherent and cogent. 3. Exploring themselves and their subconscious rhetorics through writing more consciously and critically. Engaging with these macrostructures of social experiences would be recommended. Insightful though the author is, they seem to lack the motivation to critically analyse their own biases and identify the framework of their discourse.

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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to Happy359879

    Being proven right is its own reward. 😜

    Now, the reason why this information is relevant is because I found myself in a situation where I couldn't trust any of my senses.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST

    There are a lot of things about the System that I have yet to put on paper, besides the general idea. I need to ensure that while it remains a part of the story, it doesn't take away from the main plot, which is only halfway done. Besides, as of now, and quite a bit into the future, Sasori will be in the Village so there is no need to keep an eye on him. And what would be the point even if he wasn't?.

    [Golden Tags: A Golden Tag is a single-use artefact that allows an Agent to tag an individual and track them regardless of distance and share their senses.]
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to EternallyPsyduck

    Deidara's best friend. 🤣

    For the name...A Japanese name is an obvious choice in this world, it would be weird to be called Bob Senju or something, I mean for example if you are born on the planet Vegeta you have to be named after a vegetable, have some respect.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to Smithsonian86_

    No. I don't even know what that is. When I want to come up with a name that sounds natural, I just use a randomizer.

    [A-Rank Agent : Soga Masayuki received!]
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to I_am_Baal

    With Ryuichi handling the Bounties, it won't matter if the other side has more numbers, because their best Shinobi will be dead.

    I stood in the smallest of the seven training areas that the Village had. Even though the Village was situated in the largest country, it was still the smallest of the Big Five. It's entire population summed up to around twenty-eight thousand and four-hundreds, thereabouts, of which only 320 were Shinobi. While it may seem like a lot, only around a hundred of them were capable of anything more than the Academy Three.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to Madam_Freya

    Fair.

    If one tree dares not even be taller than other trees, how can it become a giant tree?
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to Hypnos

    Does it? The only Clans we see with many members are in Konoha. We have little to no information about the clans of Suna, with the exception of 8 clans which, according to the wiki, aren't well-known outside the walls. "The few clans that exist inside of Suna are often small in number, and not well known outside the walls of the village." I don't think the total number of Shinobi would still exceed 500.

    I stood in the smallest of the seven training areas that the Village had. Even though the Village was situated in the largest country, it was still the smallest of the Big Five. It's entire population summed up to around twenty-eight thousand and four-hundreds, thereabouts, of which only 320 were Shinobi. While it may seem like a lot, only around a hundred of them were capable of anything more than the Academy Three.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to I_am_Baal

    Certainly not at this point, a few months after the Third War. And keep in mind that these figures are only the available details that Ryuichi has access to. More importantly, Iwa's whole strategy is commit a war of attrition. The whole Kannabi Bridge incident was the turning point of the war, because no matter how many Shinobi were sent, Iwa sent more. Suna is also the smallest of the Villages pre-Zabuza. It is also the poorest. It has so few people and so little land, that I am not comfortable citing numbers that would be a logistical nightmare.

    I stood in the smallest of the seven training areas that the Village had. Even though the Village was situated in the largest country, it was still the smallest of the Big Five. It's entire population summed up to around twenty-eight thousand and four-hundreds, thereabouts, of which only 320 were Shinobi. While it may seem like a lot, only around a hundred of them were capable of anything more than the Academy Three.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to cheeki_breeki

    I suppose, yeah. But I like to think of it as patriotism. There's still a lot of politics and worldbuilding that I want to explore, and these tiny details will play a part in that undertaking. Thanks for leaving a comment!

    As I pondered about the Village and its current state, that being one of sever drought, I had a few ideas about how one could mitigate the crisis, but not only would that require time and energy, but also expertise that I did not possess. I was surprised at how quickly I had adapted to thinking that the Village was my own and that it's people were my family. It genuinely felt like I had a duty to them, perhaps a remnant of my previous "self".
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    Don't know why Franz Lizst is here, but OK.

    As the sun rose over the Liszt village, in the corner of his room, Shikamaru opened his tortured eyes once again. This time he was awake and completely through the whole process of assimilating the last pill.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    Aw, man, I can't wait to read the increasingly absurd justifications for why Soseki should know things. "Of course, in order to know how to stop people from dying, a Medical-nin like him ought to know Edo Tensei." "Hai. In order for a Medical-nin to truly understand the body on a cellular level and remain strong enough to handle the duress of war, he must learn Strength of a Thousand Seals."

    Without waiting for Sōseki to speak, Asuma said calmly, "In order to be able to appear beside every injured person in time, it is reasonable for Sōseki who is a Medical-nin to know Space-Time Ninjutsu!"
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    I understand "Logical", if you stretch the definition a bit. But that's not a smart decision. The idea of having a choice in the matter is, in itself, suspicious. I would assume that in a world where bloodlines and genetic talents are very real and sacred, adoptions would be an interfilial affair, more than what was just shown, but I suppose things are different in everyone's own story.

    Due to making a logical and smart decision, you have obtained +1 WIS
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to Anniyan

    Add a comma in between "don't" and "like".

    I guess some people just don't like Jiraiya and Gaara.
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    More than 700 fanfics and 12 novels, in my repertoire, but this still remains the most unexpected and hilarious line I've had the pleasure of reading.

    "Why are you autistic?"
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Posted

    For a fanfiction, and one on Webnovel at that, it is surprisingly well-written. The author has a lot of talent in encapsulating certain raw emotions into text. The number of chapters and the lack of any updates is disheartening. I hope this review can ignite the inspiration of the Author to produce more of this good work. A few points I'd like to note as I read. 1. There is a problem with length. The Chapters ought to be longer and there is a need for exposition, over timeskips, especially at the beginning. One advice I'd give is to flesh out the characters, be it the protagonist or the other characters. What is the reason the Protagonist has for waking up or doing the things they do. Accentuate their behaviours and traits. 2. The author needs to watch out for plot holes. I'm sure they have a good idea of where they want the story to go, but building the road to that destination comes with a few problems. How did Danzo know? From what we have seen, Danzo only takes in those with extreme talent and not the ones who have no visible talents. It seems very contrived. 3. There was a touching scene, with the purchasing of flowers for the deceased mother of the protagonist and that moment of emotional vulnerability could have been explored further. Ruining certain key moments that define the philosophies of the characters in a scene is detrimental to future character development. Compared to around 95% of the fanfics and novels I've read, this certainly is much better in terms of premise, plot, dialogue, storyline, rhythm, etc. I would love to see more.

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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    Excellent chapter. A bit fast-paced, but I hope there will be more as I read on.

    Ch 3 Chapter 3: Graduation Fail
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    Forbidden Art: Claw of the Dragon Technique!

    (Name it whatever you want)
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Commented

    What a beautiful usage of an oxymoron.

    Damn.. legal lolita..
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  • UnsympatheticMoron
    UnsympatheticMoron1yr
    Replied to Madam_Freya

    In a world filled with trees, there are no men. Only living trees and fertilizer.

    If one tree dares not even be taller than other trees, how can it become a giant tree?
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