I'm sorry but inappropriate Joke and I read that as spider man

If they want to create a quality creation then they need to get used to harsh criticism.

Also you went on about one city from what I counted for 4-6 pages. That's not neccesary. As I stated before, I did not delete any comment so I have no idea what you mean by that. I'm as honest as I can be and I meant it when I said that you have potential. You have a knack for being descriptive and going into details. It's a good thing for author to have. The problem I see is that you can't temper it. You can't temper and mesh the details together and you're trying to be too poetic. Which in turn lead to your sentences being stiff and seen as "bad". I'm sorry if the review is harsh but it is indeed my honest opinion. There is a difference between writing a hardbook novel, a fanfic, a light novel and a webnovel. Your style is set and that's a good thing, you now need to refine and temper it. So it is more understable for the readers. If possible keep the 1st chapters not too long but enough to captivate the readers. Because 1st chapter is the hook, a bait for the readers. Don't try to reach the word count too hard because that often leads to info dump and makes the chapter boring and never ending stream of something that makes no sense. Like that one teacher in school who drones on about subjects that makes even the most interesting topics, boring. This is an advice and I hope you will take it.

I'm sorry I didn't delete anything?

every one, not everyone

Okay, since you're writing "for the world wide community" the "for them" part is unnecessary. It should simply be "For the world wide community to follow"

You should fix this

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

They are so cute

Is this fanservice?

So this story in and itself is very well, characterizations is very well made and written. The plot is made well and story development is good. Writing style at first is quite confusing with too many unnecessary details but it improves in the later chapters. So i would reccomend readers to be patient and continue reading. While mainstream it caught people's interest very well. So keep this up author! ! We believe in you.

So far okay.... Ish

Seems boring. I'm being honest thou but it just seems boring like an unnecessary detail that was stretched far too much

I'm not even gonna continue arguing with a person with short term memory.Have a ice day Mr. Seeking attention to stroke their Fragile masculinity

Oh I see , so you just wanted an attention. How pathetic

Then stop bitching and just read it :D

Yeah meh. If we're done please drop this story if you don't like the gender change instead of ranting about being unrealistic cause one's Gender has nothing to do with one's SEXUALITY.

Not gonna argue with you anymore thanks for taking 14 days to answer.