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molovori3yrReplied to Heavens_MonarchOkay, I agree that she wasn't raised like a normal girl, but romance novel or not, something like this should not be rushed as it will ruin the whole experience for readers. It just felt cringe. From the way he called her beautiful out of nowhere, my image of him came out a bit of a creep. I'm not hating on your work or anything I'm just trying to help out. Again, don't rush it, romance novel or not and wish-fullfillment or not. Let things build up and you'll have a story that will be satisfying to read.
Laura's hands were balled in my shirt, and her face was pressed in my chest, quietly sniffing. At first, I thought she was crying, but then I noticed that she was taking slow, deep breaths.- molovori3yrCommented
This guy gets obsessive real fast.
I guess it is the same for my Laura. She simply doesn't see anything wrong in being naked in front of me...not that I was complaining. - molovori3yrReplied to Heavens_Monarch
So? Why is she just letting a complete stranger stroke her hips like that.
Laura's hands were balled in my shirt, and her face was pressed in my chest, quietly sniffing. At first, I thought she was crying, but then I noticed that she was taking slow, deep breaths. - molovori3yrCommented
There is just no build up to it... This is just another one of those wish-lust-fullmentt fantasies of an author. Sigh....
Laura's hands were balled in my shirt, and her face was pressed in my chest, quietly sniffing. At first, I thought she was crying, but then I noticed that she was taking slow, deep breaths. - molovori3yrCommented
Author, can you stop making him say his abilities name? It's slightly cringe and sounds like he is a chunibyo. Like naruto yelling Rasengan everytime he uses it.
"Force Dominate; Kneel." Said Leo calmly. To his terror, he fell to his knees without being able to stop himself. - molovori3yrReplied to IWANTMYDINNER
Everyone is a hypocrite in some ways.
'It is either me or them and I am selfish, so yes it is okay. I won't treat my subordinates like Slaves, even if they are... Maybe I am becoming what I hate? As long as I am free then it doesn't matter...' he headed for the place criminals and such gathered. He took 8 of the creatures with him. - molovori3yrCommented
You don't have to say the ability...
He closed the box and turned to look back at Lor-Vetan and sighed, "I am not a fan of inflicting pain, I actually despise it; However, This was your punishment so I had to do it; I will now put you out of your misery... Force Drain." - molovori3yrCommentedCh 39 Chapter 39
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You should start calling them by their actual Villain names. His name is Everyman. I keep getting confused on who you are talking about.
About an hour later went in the house Barry, and behind him came the stone. When they both entered, I heard a muffled sound. This meant that the Faceless one had knocked out Flash... Yeah, the kid's got super speed, but his brain doesn't really work, poor guy. Just as I was about to go to them, Caitlin appeared and went into Allen's house. Immediately after that, I took action... - molovori3yrReplied to Darkstep
Gwen is nice. There is also Felicia Hardy (specifically **4 version, she hot af) , creating a chaotic duo with MC, would be fun to read. Jean is overdone and she is too emotional. Rogue, I don't know much about her personality, but I heard she is the most beautiful in Marvel. Jessica Jones would also be a fun read if the author gets her personality right. Scarlet Witch would be a bland duo. There are a lot the author can pair MC with, but he is probably planning on a harem so I'm just reading now until it goes downhill from there. If author changes his mind, then don't get MJ or Jean it's overdone or just completely boring.
...I guess she truly is that age, huh? Girls usually do start liking boys quicker than boys start liking girls. Doesn't mean I can reciprocate anything like that to people around my age - I'm not in the business of liking kids, unlike some sick individuals. - molovori3yrCommented
Lmao screw Scott
Jean instantly blushed at the question before she looked somewhat frustrated with the question, "Is that all you want me to answer?" she asked and I nodded with a wide smile, "Then no, we're not," just as she finished answering me, she disappeared from the room and withdrew from my mind. Oof. Poor Scott...not even a single second of hesitation. - molovori3yrReplied to Stan_WheelerCh 3 First Day of Highschool
- molovori3yrReplied to ArtoriaPendragon_
Nah, let Peter have MJ, she's useless as a cardboard and her personality is that of a dead tree. Have the MC date someone more interesting.
...I guess she truly is that age, huh? Girls usually do start liking boys quicker than boys start liking girls. Doesn't mean I can reciprocate anything like that to people around my age - I'm not in the business of liking kids, unlike some sick individuals. - molovori3yrCommented
In my opinion, MJ has always been a useless character in all stories. Sure she's the most popular but she ain't the best girl. FeliciaGang4Life
She looked over at me and just...stared. Then she blushed, which set off a few alarm bells in my head - I mean, I know I'm good-looking by having a minor blush while looking at me? Goddamn that feels uncomfortable. I mean, I was only 17 when I died in my last life but still...I don't want young teens blushing at the sight of me, man. Is this how the members of BTS felt all the time? Poor fuckers, man. - molovori3yrCommented
If her personality is like MJ in the Raimi Trilogy then screw that. She a hoe on that one. Felicia Gang.
"Sorry about my daughter - the move has left her in a bit of sulky mood. I can take the door if you want?" the woman apologized for having me keep the door open and she was obviously giving me a chance to move out of the way for her to keep the door open...but who would I be to give up a chance to meet THE Mary Jane Watson? An idiot, is what I'd call that type of person. - molovori3yrCommented
Manipulate her and make her fall in love with you. đ
Hmm, why don't I step in? Caitlin is a great bioengineer, a beautiful girl, and in the future will be Killer frost. Having a good relationship with her would be nice, plus I could use some help exploring my own body right now. If I can reach an agreement with her, it would be very useful for me. - molovori3yrCommented
DNA Evidence
I spat out the blood and moved closer to the guy. - molovori3yrReplied to I_am_potato_lord
Lol that part was my attempt at being humorous.
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Please no white hair and red eyes.
"Ok here's a character creation screen, edit how you want to look in your physical prime and you'll grow into it, I'll be nice and give your body a gift, no matter what you eat or drink you'll look exactly as you designed your body to, so enjoy all the fatty fast food you want." My eyes light up hearing this, no more grilled, skinless chicken! No more fucking salads and veggies, no more protein shakes and supplements! - molovori3yrReplied to I_am_potato_lord
Lol I get what you mean, but there are so many authors that has way worse search histories because they are writing a serial killer fic with very disturbing scenes. Searches like - "How to seduce a unicorn." This will definitely get the FBI's attention.
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