I think its a grate story so far but don't let other people tell you how to write it. But let helpful and good comments inspire you so it can be more fun for you. And don't let hateful and mean comments get to you it takes courage to post your work so just have fun and you will see it in your work

i have read a lot of these type of novels so i started to get bored but this has drone me back in keep up the good work