the story is quite terrible to be honest, the story is boring and weird at the same time. hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhjhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

the entire story seems too convenient for the mc. The mc has literally faced no setbacks, opposition and struggle. The way he confidently dismisses more powerful people than him is frankly laughably absurd because we all know he ain't that smart and charismatic enough to not get burned by daemon or ruined by his own hubris.

From a dragon, he now has the ability to turn into a human. why make him a non human in the first place you could have just made him a powerful valyrian sorcerer in the beginning. no need for the whole nonsense you pulling off now.

a whole lot of nothing is happening. gonna dropped until theres like 200 chapters or something. Individual chapters are so short that five chapters of this story would equal one normal chapter.

this story feels like it was made by ai......................,...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................,...............................................................,.......................................................................,. ................

This story is slowly getting worse with all of this filler stuff

these characters don't act like those in the books or in the show. The way they react to certain situations is completely different from the source material. the only character i see that reacts or behaves like from the source material is robert baratheon.

no

Its another run of the mill op mc story. Terrible plot overall .............................................,........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

cringe, edgy teenager sh**

the mc seems like an edgelord

is this Wikipedia?

the grammar doesn't make any sense

shameless plagiarism of the original work. stop trying to pass it off as your own fic here's the original by the way: https://m.fanfiction.net/s/13923897/1/Locke-s-Legion

what a massive cringe lord

pls don't continue this story. it's absolutely terrible.

cringe pls stop writing since your terrible at it. Find another Hobby

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for goodness sake get a beta reader or proofreader. something,anything that would help you with your grammar.

your english hurts my soul. it's so baaaaaad