Your tenses and grammar 🥲

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Silver king can’t control gravity, he only has inviolability and immortality as his powers so where are you getting this from?

It’s “especially” 😂😂😂

Since he’s a genius and has been investing , I think the next step would be him in the shadows implimenting new tech into the old devices or setting up a company that does microchips etc. then for assassinations I think the system will now be the one to dictate the assassinations which would probably be off criminals like real world serial killers of unsolved cases, I think from the real world you can use unsolved cases as a way of not running out of ideas. The best implementation of this I’ve seen is Swarm the TV series based on real life murders but they put their own character as the murder, so you just need to source that information , make up a believable character that performs those cases

Why do most DXD fics focus on stealing Sacred Gears and wanting to be like the MC with a harem of his woman making them theirs. I thought you would develop a story where it wasn’t all about being like Issei but better but it’s all the same repackaged story. No offense but I’m disappointed. I was actually loving the idea of developing alchemy and when I read about him getting basic spell books I thought he’d learn something like alchemy circle manifestation like the way magic circles do in the air not this 😤

The tenses are horrid, the story seems interesting but it’s hard to read. Please,revise your chapters with MS Word or something that will actually help you construct sentences that make sense

What orphanage are you talking about here? And please deal with your grammar

How did he get it in the first place?

I actually think I like it, not enough to give a rating yet but I see you took my last comment into consideration about expanding the wizarding world back whe the Dimensional fix was starting and I look forward to seeing where you with it

Progenitor doesn’t mean what you think it means 🤦🏿‍♂️ it means ancestor,forebearer or the most used meaning ,originator. It does have anything to do with being the best in a certain race,it means you’re the beginner of the race,where they come from

Why does this sound like Teen Titans Go, that is personally the worst representation of them I have ever seen. I hate it,way too childish. I would appreciate them sounding like the Titans TV Series,human like and less cartoony

Rogue

Cliffanger kun 😡😡

I’m interested in the Teen Wolf one with Mr Harris,the young justice one sounds cool but there have been too many so far and I liked a few that still get me good,I really wanted to see what you could do with Extremis in DC and I am willing to wait for you to blow my mind. For marvel,marvel has a lot going on and I’ve read many from even comic lovers and it’s honestly been exhausting.

I think someone is already is writing a fic like that,along that premise of Dc

This is Setsuna F Seiei from Gundam,his eyes just do it for me. Looks like gold pixelated eyes with highlights of silver,red etc.

It’s “infinite luck” not infinity luck

9000 IQ,really?? That’s too far fetched for the human brain. Even Reed Richards is not that smart,the IQ test in the 25th century must have been super easy for someone to get an IQ in the thousands 😂😂😂