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I can understand where you're coming from Ein. Better having to wait longer for a finished series, than have it never completed because the author neglected their health. Keep up the good work, so long as you never give up on it I will never give up on you!
This is a really interesting take on the thoughts of the members of the devil race. I really love seeing intelligent interpretations of already existing characters and their reactions to an out of context player in their lives. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Okay, I noticed you didn't say willpower but force of will. Is there a difference and if so what is it?
So I have been wondering this for a while. What is Authority? Why does it seem to be more important than willpower and how does one develop their authority? Is it like a muscle that you can train or do you need to do something specific like a specific action to increase/develop it?
I like the second option because Spike from Cowboy Bebop had a very epic ending, but if he's going to be a troll like Zeldrich, then no. Messing with the badguy by trolling them to death sounds fun, but unnecessary when it gives them more time to make others miserable. Giving Vahn the confidence of Gilgamesh sounds even worse unless you have him look back on his actions regularly to make sure this is what he wants and he isn't doing something that past Vahn would look down upon. Then the confidence thing would just loop back to his old habits of overanalyzing. So maybe something like the confidence of Samus Aran from Metroid that she commits to a goal and sticks with it. That goal being up to you.
Who was it that shattered a god's teeth? I can't remember it from this novel.
Great chapter as always. While I can understand the need for giving Vahn's girls their personal space, I don't think Vahn can give much more without causing even more problems for himself and his harem in the future. Vahn needs to be a bit more self centered and choose the option best for him. The third option is out because it causes him the most stress and emotional pain. The first could work for the girls that don't hold as much of a place in his heart but only a few. The second is what I pick because he can keep his emotional support girls by his side. Maybe bring a girl who is a bit more domineering and have her put down some boundaries when Vahn starts going overboard. That or have sis put her foot down.
Because there are fanfics about going against the original story and creating one that shows growth of the character and the growth that occurs of the people from the characters choices. This isn't one. And now that I know that, I can leave this story to find one that is to my liking.
That doesn't make what's going on any better. That's like saying that a crime is okay because a famous person did it and you wanted to imitate them. It's just an excuse.
I just realized this I don't know much about how innates work for this story. What caused this train of though was that the people developed from Vahn like Gandr have their own innates, but aren't they supposed to be egos that are still attached to his soul? If so then innates stem from the ego rather than the soul.