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DavidDarllan

DavidDarllan

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Brazilian and 17 years old author, I am learning English so I would love if you guys helped me to improve it.

2019-10-15 JoinedGlobal
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
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    it's my first official work and I hope to improve my writing and English quality more and more. I am not a native English speaker, my name is David and I'm 17 years old writing my first novel in an attempt to share my dream world and improve my English, so I hope you help me.

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    The journey of a Miserable
    Fantasy · DavidDarllan
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Posted

    Hi, author here. it's my first official work and I hope to improve my writing and English quality more and more. I am not a native English speaker, my name is David and I'm 17 years old writing my first novel in an attempt to share my dream world and improve my English, so I hope you help me.

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    The journey of a Miserable
    Fantasy · DavidDarllan
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Replied to LuffyLucy

    Thank you, I hadn't figured the synopsis of the book before it, I was having a hard time creating it, but thank you for your comment, I really appreciate it

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    The journey of a Miserable
    Fantasy · DavidDarllan
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Commented

    Hi, I am the author here. I am not a native speaker and I am an English learner, so this novel is a way to improve my English skills and to make a thing that a love that is to write a fantasy, because since young I've been thinking a lot of fantasy books, so I hope you forgive me for the badly written and I hope you help me to improve it.

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    The journey of a Miserable
    Fantasy · DavidDarllan
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Posted

    The first two chapters show a world dog eat dog that we are used to seeing in xianxia novels. The novel's mc is a kind and good guy that knows what is to be weak in a world where the strongest can kill the weakest without be arrested or suffer something. I liked the first two chapters and I want to read more, you can make a good novel if you keep the hard work

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    Origin Master
    Action · Shlok_Vas
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Commented

    I would keep walking foward haahahahah.in terror movie the First guy who die Always twist to see whats is behind

    Ch 2 Premonition
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    Crescent Moon
    Fantasy · Micki_Keller
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Commented

    Thats a great way to do a prologue.

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Crescent Moon
    Fantasy · Micki_Keller
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Replied to CaptainKenji

    Hahaha okay

    "It's dark." I thought to myself.
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    The Making of a Legend
    Anime & Comics · CaptainKenji
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  • DavidDarllan
    DavidDarllan3yr
    Commented

    would be better: "I thought". because if you thought it's obvious was by yourself

    "It's dark." I thought to myself.
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    The Making of a Legend
    Anime & Comics · CaptainKenji
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