first of all you seams new writer. it’s ok keep writing you will Learn more. about story development It's like other Chinese cultivation novel but you add some extra about haven that other novel don’t say. you didn’t say much about main character design how he looks now. update is main factor keep it up update Daily. Don't make world like main character go from one realm to another It's boring. make something different. keep learning and keep this novel as long as you write You'll Learn. your idea is so keep it up.