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ooowwweee7dReplied to DLich8and tapestry of fate too
A battle raged on. A fight to decide the lives of many. A war between Gods, man and the like, woven into the tapestry of fate- ooowwweee1mthReplied to Black_Bolt_
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Give me your opinion and criticism about the chapter, I can only improve my story If you point out what is wrong and what is needed to change. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
shirou is so annoying and inconsiderate here. I would have expected Able to kill him or take the arm with the command seals already just for using a command seal to make him stop his attack
He'd have to make Saber kill himself then, but Shirou...he didn't know if he could really do that. - ooowwweee1mthReplied to The_Tube
japanese shortening for the words of high-school girls in japanese
Farewell, young girls. (With Byakuya's level of courage, he didn't dare to covet Justeaze and Scáthach.) - ooowwweee1mthCommented
Too much talk. almost no show. what's the point of reading his thoughts when that's the entire story in this arc? My favourite part in overlord stories is in truth the game part. Not the New World one. However we don't see much about the game here. only him bragging... and bragging... and bragging while daring us to refute him! where is that journey whose importance you talked about??? what's is the point here? why do we only hear of his "exploits" but not see them?? if it continues like this it would have been better to skip the game entirely (even when I dislike the New World part in most stories)
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you're just a d*mb*ss
So yeah, while some players might be charging headfirst into the heart of danger, I prefer to play it safe. Why risk losing all those hard-earned levels and experience points when I can still rack up a decent amount right where I am? Call me cautious, call me a chicken, but I call it playing smart. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
no it isn't what "keeps things interesting" that's supposed to be the possibilities, options and freedom. NOT the challenges. That was the main selling point of the game. the freedom of choice
Ah, the eternal struggle of leveling up in YGGDRASIL. It's like trying to climb a mountain made of Jell-O—you take one step forward and slide back two steps. But hey, that's what keeps things interesting, right? Keeps you on your toes, so to speak. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
honestly I still have hope for this story but it's starting to dwindle. At least say in the synopsis it's an AU or something. If not then do not just change whatever you want willy nilly.
I managed to level up to 50, which might sound low compared to other games, but in YGGDRASIL, it's a pretty respectable level. You see, the experience needed to level up increases with each level, so hitting level 50 is no small feat. It's like climbing a mountain made of experience points—one level at a time. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
the too-detailed decriptions and his personality that gets pleased, satisfied and arrogant so esily is already getting annoying, hopefully it improves in the future
Give me your opinion and criticism about the chapter, I can only improve my story If you point out what is wrong and what is needed to change. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
c'mon man. the game wasn't that realistic in the original. Is this an AU or is a chuuni?
But amidst the haunting landscape, I soon spotted my first target—a lone skeleton wandering aimlessly through the mist, its hollow eye sockets fixed on me with a gaze that seems to suck my soul out. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
There's too many mentions of his excitement, aticipation and andrenalin IMO. there is generally too many repeats of a lot of the same or similar descriptions and words, I think the story could be better with less repetition.
As I set out into the murky depths of Helheim, my mind buzzed with excitement and anticipation, eager to test out my newfound skills and abilities. With each step, I couldn't help but marvel at the eerie beauty of my surroundings—the twisted trees, the ominous fog, the bone-chilling silence that hung in the air like a shroud. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
he's getting too scared of a VIRTUAL world and acting like he will really feel pain or something. taking the game seriously is fine and expected, but it's annoying how he feels fear/drear/etc at every single thing.
Give me your opinion and criticism about the chapter, I can only improve my story If you point out what is wrong and what is needed to change. - ooowwweee1mthReplied to LordAinzSama
what happened?
Raphael: I am Genderless Android so I don't have balls. - ooowwweee1mthCommented
didn't you say he trained it since the last time? why is it still the same? why aren't any of his techniques improving too?
Water Fist Style: C - ooowwweee1mthCommented
wasn't this upgraded to EX already as a reward for a quest or something?
Mystic Eyes of Terror: A++ - ooowwweee1mthCommented
where is water streaming rock smashing fist?
Meggido God's Wrath: B+ - ooowwweee2mthReplied to KamikazeDrew
like most of the entire chapters until noe
Only Fang Li can see the Death Line. - ooowwweee2mthCommented
why don't you repeat that a few more times? The first time wasn't clear enough
However, on the surface of a Kabane's heart, there is a steel-like skin membrane that even a Steam Gun cannot penetrate. - ooowwweee2mthCommented
finally!! an entire chapter of monologue! when we already knew everything said there! in the middle of a f**king conversation!!
Kurono watched the reaction of Tsukasa and Touka with interest and wanted to know why Tsukasa was being called the Magus, but she could tell that neither of them wanted to tell her, especially when Tsukasa kept looking at Touka. - ooowwweee2mthCommented
and this is why I hate the new world part of overlord stories, they only follow canon but people love it so much somehow.
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