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lil_bitch23dCommentedWhy would he do that?
A waiter approached them as soon as he sat down, and Qin Feng ordered his meal in broken Arabic, but unbeknownst to him, Keith knew very well that the man in front of him was fluent in this language.- lil_bitch5mthCommented
What did he reply to?
"Yes, thank you," he replied, vigorously holding the young heroine's hand, a little thought in his mind. "How's your first day on the job?" - lil_bitch5mthCommentedCh 31 Grand Meeting.
- lil_bitch8mthCommentedCh 83 Lavish Gifts
- lil_bitch9mthReplied to PhotosphereCh 79 Encore
- lil_bitch10mthCommentedCh 62 God Beast’s Invasion (IV)
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Why would you want that? If you don't got s.th good to say, say nothing.
There was a lot more details that I didn't add. Especially in the part between my first performance and the decades after that. The young me was very passionate about my dreams and a LOT of things had to happen for me to finally put it down for good. Like how at one point, I seriously considered running away and cutting all ties with the ducal household, or when I realized how low my sister had fallen due to envy. - lil_bitch10mthCommented
Either say 'there was a lot more detail' or 'there were a lot more details'.
There was a lot more details that I didn't add. Especially in the part between my first performance and the decades after that. The young me was very passionate about my dreams and a LOT of things had to happen for me to finally put it down for good. Like how at one point, I seriously considered running away and cutting all ties with the ducal household, or when I realized how low my sister had fallen due to envy. - lil_bitch10mthCommented
stick to present or past tense. Don't bounce between both in the same paragraph.
Everything that he makes has styles and patterns, that are unique to him and only him. And it wasn't just different for the sake of being different. It is something that is genuinely good- it was pleasant to the ears, it sounded natural, it progressed beautifully. No matter where I look, I cannot find any compositions that share any similarities with the things that he's shown me. - lil_bitch10mthCommented
perhaps saying 'he would' rather than 'will' would be more fluent.
He still has a few years left where his growth would be at a similar rate to that of a human's. After that he will join me and the rest of elvish society and have their appearance get seemingly frozen in time. - lil_bitch10mthCommented
Perhaps to should be 'I can not'
But how embarrassing would it be for me if he was able to somehow manage to escape from my clutches and overpower me at such a young age? I can, and will not, allow him to leave my embrace until I'm satisfied. - lil_bitch10mthReplied to prcvsl
lol just reread it
I did some writing on the side to see if my writing quality is up to par with how it previously was, and I'm feeling confident again so I feel like I could resume this one. Again, if you're still one of the readers who are still reading this after more than a year of no updates, I will do my best to write quality chapters to make up for it. - lil_bitch11mthCommentedCh 24 Toxic Girlfriend.
- lil_bitch1yrReplied to Sinful_Cyanide
this is a gross over-generalization.
Not all nurses or doctors were necessarily altruistic, but this did not change the fact that their job was to save lives. They were worthy of respect and he didn't want to show them a scowl. - lil_bitch1yrCommentedCh 226 Encounter
- lil_bitch1yrReplied to Magecrafter
Just wanted to say I like how you accept and appreciate mistakes rather than others who get pissed off or ignore them. Also, it sounds better to put the word “though” before the rest of the sentence. Like this: “though, there might be loot!” But as a native speaker, it’s prolly better to just leave the comma so “there might be loot though!”
This paragraph has been deleted. - lil_bitch1yrCommentedCh 102 Chapter 102
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Ye I’m out as well. Man’s writing with his emotions rather than his head
Having the memories of Julian, Berengar was now a closet atheist. Nevertheless, he still put on the appearance of a devout Catholic because he knew the consequences a man of science would endure in this primitive era. It would take decades, but maybe he could usher in the scientific revolution a bit earlier than in his own timeline if he worked hard at it.