A shame you think origin stories are “BS”, that’s like taking away Uncle Ben for Spider-Man or Batman’s parents being shot in an alley. This is supposed to give us an understanding of his character moving forward with the Naruto world…

As far as I remember he still holds affection for Charles and is waiting to see what his character is like before any action is taken.

+1 I’m more of a binge reader so I take breaks and come back.

You should have him create and use the umbrella weapon from Kings Avatar.

Also, not sure how you will explain the delayed chakra awakening, but maybe you could say that his chakra was feeding his body to make it stronger and only now is his body strong enough to have some left over. It could help with explaining his naturally stronger One Piece body.

Hey Author, just want to start off with saying that I think you’re doing a pretty good job so far. As for the powers, please don’t give known eye powers/bloodline limits. It’ll be difficult to explain why the son of Might Guy and a civilian have known Naruto powers. As for giving powers similar to animals, I think it could be fairly interesting as long as there’s a reason Kai can give to everyone else. I think the easiest way to write about getting powers, is maybe something like giving Kai a One Piece body w/ knowledge of fighting techniques or maybe even Haki. It could be explained by saying Kai has a naturally powerful body and he created these techniques similar to how Might Duy did the 8 gates. Maybe you could even have Kai improve the 8 gates so the user doesn’t die. Any way, keep up the good work. I’d love to see this story to the end.

🤷‍♂️ I’m fine with whoever can also strive for greatness. Don’t need a trophy.

It’s sometimes are to distinguish where someone is talking or thinking because you use “ for both. Try to use “ for talking and ‘ for thinking.

As for the Devil fruit, it should be something low key but really useful. Maybe the Panacea could cure the sea weakness of the Devil fruit?

Use this time while the lucky potion is still working to buy some stocks or something to earn steady money.

I mean, Tonks reaction is a bit much… She says he’s always a liar, how would she know that? She can most certainly hear Vernon mention no food for a week and possible beatings they he used to get.. She has to be imperioused or something right?

You could just take the Genshin character, put it in ChatGPT take make her realistic.

You should make this bus be able to fly, go to the depths of the sea and be able to shrink (maybe everything in it goes into a stasis so things don’t fall off shelves of something) so he can put it on a chain or keep in his pocket.

Enjoying it so far, please continue to the end!

Please don’t have too many in the Harem, and try to make your choices based on ability. If one character doesn’t have let’s say mind protection, then another member can cover for there deficiency. Maybe you have a smart character and another who is all about fighting, try to make sure everyone compliments each other.

If there is summoning, make it a pet.

It’s a bit early for an accurate 5-star review, but I found myself sad when I realized I had already read the first 3 chapters and there were no more. I’m not sure what your take on alchemy will be, but I’m looking forward to it.

This Rosier chick is getting really annoying

Pretty sure he was failing his Spanish class.

Why was he punished? The Hat said he could ask any questions he had and it’s silly that he was called to the Headmasters office in the middle of the sorting ceremony. Although it’s not really a complaint about the Headmaster, since it’s a common theme in most FanFics, but he’s worried about Felix turning into another Tom, but doesn’t realize/ignores that he isn’t a child harming psychopath and the other orphans love him….