Nice way to say ima deadbeat, father

This is before she left him

Love the story so far keep up the good work

I can get behind that

It really depends I how the character is depicted to feel

Awe your so cute 🥰 kiss kiss this mommy is going to enjoy all her disgusting stories

Get a life dude

That’s good . To be honest I have will be dropping this book to my Library is completely different from before. The story had a new and fresh concept that I have a really read before.Yes so far the story is good but now it feels like every other story out there. Good luck on your writing Journey wishing you the best in telling your stories.

Because of what he commented that’s why I said that

Though I like the story so far it feels like it’s just a completely different story than before I thought it was just a rewrite but feels like it’s completely different just a different story with the same title I don’t know how to put it I just thought you where rewriting the story but it looks more like you’re writing a different story altogether but you’re keeping the same title

If you don’t like possible gay play action why are you trying to read a book with a gender swap in it weirdo

I was so scared good thing it’s just a rewrite

The story so far is promising

villain*

A harem would be nice as long as it’s maximum 5/6 minimum 3/4 if there are to many girls it only takes away from the story or the girls just end up boring/sidekickish having a side couple would be nice or if you want the mc romance could be 1v1 while a side character could have a harem it would be funny

Waiting for the update

I don’t actually like this “queen” she is quite annoying

Well this needs to be updated

Okay do what you have to do to make the story good

Because honestly if they aren’t paying your bills why are you changing your story to fit their wants and needs. Maybe they should write their own damn story. Just tag yuri in and put explanation in the synopsis that some of the sex scenes will include Yuri and if they have a problem with it pick another story to read. It’s your story you’re the author is your idea to create the story is your idea to write down the scenes within the story pertaining to the subject of the MC you’re the one who came up with the idea of the story like they didn’t participate in this at all if it’s a critique on how you’re writing something because it’s harder to read then that’s fine but on how you’re creating your story and what’s going on with the new story is a bit much because some people have great plans on stories but don’t know how to execute them then they re-somebody else’s story and I see how it’s like basically the same idea and then want to tell you how to truly do it just to make you change it into what they want it to be that is not your own story is theirs sorry if this is hard to read I’m using the voice thingy on my phone