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Continue writing Your Father(3-5 Chapters per day) - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommented
I have, not you have.
"You have Linglong… Ahem, what are you talking about?" Jun Xiaoyao cleared his throat in annoyance. - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommented
She is reffered to as a she/her so this pronoun needs edited.
His words shocked many forces around him. - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommented
This needs edited. Xiao Chen isn’t berating himself, even though the text says he is.
"How dare he insult a woman? Is he even human?" Xiao Chen berated Xiao Chen. - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommented
Imina just wants headpats from Vahn.
(A/N: Is this a motherf**king Jo-I mean, EPIC reference...!? Also, this chapter is a long boi.) - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommented
Wth?
<font style="vertical-align: inherit;"><font style="vertical-align: inherit;">Yan Huang Yıldızı, Yangzhou Bölgesi, Tianshui Şehri, Baisha Bölgesi, Tianshui Şehri 95. Ortaokul, Lisenin Üçüncü Yılı, on altı, beyaz giysili bir genç son pozisyonda oturuyor, iki gözü de Yan Huang Yıldız Tarihi kitabına bakıyor, ağız mırıldanıyor kendi kendine: "Ben Xia Ping, Earthling mi yoksa Yan Huang Star mı, bu gerçekten bir rüya mı?"</font></font> - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommentedCh 368 Joining the Battle
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I honestly think he should only have the four main elements and their offshoots(lightning, ice, metal, etc.) I also don’t understand how there is a biokinesis element from his four elements. The only powers he should have are from elements. If you’re giving him random powers than he might as well be God. Also, if you don’t want to use light, mix the elements to make a combination.
This chapter has been deleted. - TurquoiseTurtle2yrCommentedFor 16 years, he used Saitama's way of practice, crazy running, doing push-ups, training in the hot summer holding a thick quilt, in winter he was only wearing a vest and shorts. However, he was unable to get stronger.
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Literally reposting and stealing Dark Wolf Shiro’s work. I don’t understand how it is a translation when it was already in well written english. You’re disgusting for posting this without his permission.
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John Wick?
But that was also when the cold-hearted killer slowly fell in love and married a woman. He then left the secret Russian organisation along with his profession. - TurquoiseTurtle3yrPosted
Grammar is fine but when pov switches it is awkward. No world background information besides the mention two cities. No descriptions of characters. I don’t know what anyone looks like. I don’t know anything about the character’s personality, features, and past. All I know is that he was new to this world.