LittleBoyDeath

Honestly, switch to Third Person POV. The First Person POV is getting awkward. Especially for characters that aren’t the MC.

SHUT UP AND STOP COMPLAINING. WE GET IT. WE DON’T NEED IT SAID 82 TIMES.

Umm.. he’s actually the reincarnation of Veldanava and Lucia’s first unborn child.

Maybe use [] for the system? Having it sound like it’s talking aloud is kind of annoying.

You said 200,000 not 2 million.

Y’all need to stop using bold. It speaks of AI translation, and if not, then it’s just tacky. It disrupts the reading by drawing eyes to it constantly and is ANNOYING.

Lumine, Paimon, Barbara, Jean and Lisa. Not sure if Venti counts. So either 5 or 6. Use basic math, dipshit.

I mean, it depends. I’ve seen plenty of fanfics where the ability can be used through meditation but it’s ridiculously difficult so most go the potions route, which is less powerful. So, maybe? But I’ve also seen fics where they can copy abilities and it doesn’t require a potion. So..

Yeah, I’m pretty sure this is before the 4th book. She was basically described as a frizzy-haired beaver in the books before she had her hair and teeth fixed.

To go unnoticed. If he thought he was in the ancient past, pirates were a thing then.