Ice_Drow

The relationship between MC and Nyx makes no sense and is ruinous to the entire novel, extremely disappointing that I am dropping what has been a decent novel, but the MC has been getting dumber and dumber making one stupid and irrational decision after another. Author is over his head and it has become increasingly clear he is out of his depth, writing wise.

He may be the dumbest MC to have ever been written, Will he be this retarded for the entire novel?

I appreciate you writing, but I have to disagree here (weird to argue with the writer), but as a reader it doesn’t read this way. He isn’t interacting with a nascent soul, he is merely interacting with a gold core, no different than the prior scene where the GU killed off the other gold core just prior to going back to the corpse sect. I think the book is very good, these minor inconsistencies stand out as the MC is usually very consistent and thoughtful.

I have complained before about lazy writing, here is another example. Every interaction with the MC has seen him placing his insects on someone, for some mysterious unknown and unwritten reason he did not do so in the insantance, how can one not attribute this to lazy writing and trying to force tension.

I think we can atribute this to lazy writing not comprehension. You can’t comprehend something that is not written, generally I have love this novel, but I find these forced sex tropes lazy.

What trash, trashy writer writing this garbage. So the son was in the room with the flower and he wasnt poisoned, nor the MC until the wife shows up. Such lazy writing, novel immediately became 1 star garbage.

Awful awful chapter, very disappointing

Why RAPE after 1900 pages of a very enjoyable read do we really need to add RAPE to the menu. I would have rated this novel extremely high, it is repetitive but always interesting, but I feel cheated by the RAPE trope, which is not necessary. Women RAPING a man is still RAPE, it isn’t cute, clever or ever mans fantasy to be RAPED, in fact it’s disgusting either way. So disappointed in this addition to the novel.

Is every woman written as a whore? This is seriously disturbing and I would like to know if it’s worth continuing to read.

I wrote something I shouldn’t have in reply, I see you are the author so let me explain my point of view. You freely admit in the begging English of the novel is very difficult to read, but I stuck with it becuase I really enjoyed the premise and where it was going. Then the writing improved as well as the grammar/English and it became an instant favorite, the focus on the Golems was a pleasure to read. Now comes the challenging part, the academy arch was good ( I absolutely love academy arch’s) a bit different than the norm, but I liked the direction. My criticism is that you did not establish why anyone in their right mind would stay at an Academy that treats people so poorly, none of it makes sense without explanation. Frankly is isn’t terrible, just a bit disappointing and hard to fathom. Now where the novel feel of the cliff is the entire competition, page after page of senseless fights that do not enforce the main character and add no value to the novel. If you are paying 12-14 stones for each page it becomes very aggravating and to top it off absolutely nothing about the golems, just an offhand they increased a level. This is where I got angry and wrote the review, I do think people have a right to know when a novel promises one thing and delivers another they should be warned. You say my timeline is filled with criticism, this may be true, but there is nothing more aggravating than reading a beast taming novel for example that doesn’t focus on beat taming after 100 pages and your investment as a reader. Shouldn’t prospective readers be warned? I do think your novel is creative and a cut above the most, it fails when it looses focus on the primary premise. Becuase I appreciate you responding I will delete the review.