Good day! I'd love to reply to your review but the computer won't let me. If you deleted it, know it is much welcomed in any form, a critic is more important if it's negative. Here's what I planned to reply: Actually I am reading and keeping every review. Yours, as bad as it can look will be fairly given light as it can only allow me to progress if I correct the mistakes you've highlighted. Up to the fifth chapter you've passed through the long intro (world building and sympathise with the mc, learn which side character is important). A violent incident caused Arthur to have ahead trauma, I believe it's not as readable as I thought. I'll work on it. Up do date, the 69th chapter is under writing, the few ten-ish I am bottling up are ongoing changes as I advance through the story. I thank thee for your time and sincerity. I hope to see you later.

This encounter was over the top and quite the abrupt stop from the fight Also I find him a little slow-brained for a number person

Ah nevermind 8 meteors and 9 elements?

not dark ? woat!

That's suspicious

Oh boy isn't it relieving

We can read his thoughts out loud at any time, but I don't understand the need to have a guard in front of a school

There is no whatsoever harem in this novel

Not really, 1AM and I spent time on each other's novel to point out mistakes and points other things out, I was thanking his patience and clarity

I believe you need to focus on one tense for your storytelling. Some phrases are grammarily incorrect because of that. also you have a lot of capital letters everywhere, it does not respect the ponctuation. It saddens me because your first chapter is overall poetic and extremely heavy to read, it's a great job

using blood as ink is very emo like also using blood to draw anything makes it stink really hard

this is original, quite a short premise but I hope to find the kind of mood in that old cartoon (Treasure Planet) hope to read more soon, this is some great reading~

There's a lot of effort inside this writing style, even some concealed humour and always a kind word in AN The synopsis just throws the story much farther than the first chapters though! Definitely reading this, great work

This mind game was complicated for this tiny brain of mine. I wonder what could have happened if Nathair was the intruder. He gauged their ages sure but if he came across people extremely different from him then the mind-game could've have ended up much worse (or so I hope)

Ah I got lost, I don't know precisely who's talking

The title of the chapter, I'm dead

Oh boy I had a good laugh

Gantz vibes

Hold'up he ready to fight? What kind of company did he take back from his uncle?