The story was good I read up to chapter 29 I would’ve given you a 5 stars but you plagiarize a chapter from another writer on here which is called the Brightest Doom. That bar scene is straight from the brightest doom. You cannot steal people’s writing try to pass it as yours.

This is stolen work this is not the original author

Law* not Yang

Stop putting quotation marks in the middle of what is being said. You only need two quotation marks

Snorting?lol

This -> “…”..” is wrong in English grammar. This ->”…” is the correct way

Thanks for the chapter here is something you should fix when you’re writing what someone said you need only two of these “..” one at the beginning and one at the end of the final word said by the speaker. This is->”….”…” wrong

Landing*

Train to tomorrow*

Snack*

Far*

Her

Her wings

Herself

Her

Her

Her

Her

She and her

Her