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Seven_0079mthCommentedCh 1 Gift Assignment [1]- Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 12 Incongruent Events (1)
- Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 10 The Beauty and The Mob (2)
- Seven_0071yrCommented''What witch? My mother-in-law?''
- Seven_0071yrPosted
The work has a very good idea. A well summarized but relatively strange synopsis may not please many, so I suggest you take a look at it later. I can't give too much of a review given there isn't much content available at the moment, however. here are some things about the work: The writing is normal/okay and doesn't get in the way, but it could be improved. Grammatical errors are constant and, if possible or necessary, I highly recommend using tools that can help you fix this. Also remember to improve the spacing you use between lines; in some situations it was a bit confusing to understand the descriptions. The idea is cool and can be worked on to improve over time. I'll try to stay here on your journey, and I'll come back later to make further observations about the work. Finally, sorry for the somewhat "superficial" review, and keep up the good work.
- Seven_0071yrCommented
Smart move, I hope it stays that way.
''Let's start with the first step!'' He said, smiling slightly out of the corner of his mouth. ''Make notes about important things so I don't forget!'' - Seven_0071yrCommented
*to the one of his new (...)*
This paragraph has been deleted. - Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 3 Fresh Memories
- Seven_0071yrCommented
I do know a person...
Who would want to admit they'd been transported to an unknown place out of nowhere? Wouldn't that be enough to horrify the average person? - Seven_0071yrCommented''What are you talking about, you crazy girl?''
- Seven_0071yrCommentedFrankly, it was evident that he was poor.
- Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 1 Incongruous Events [PROLOGUE]
- Seven_0071yrCommented
Magic MF
It was like a magic pass. Everything just happened. - Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 11 A Reliable Backup
- Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 9 Gift Assignment [Part II] [Bonus]
- Seven_0071yrPosted
[Reposting the review I made earlier!] To sum it up, in the five chapters that were published, a good quality of writing is perceptible, and it readily contributes to the progress of the story. I liked the way the characters and spaces are introduced, and their dialogues that help in the world building and demonstration of the world ranks. As for stability, 5 chapters at once got me, and surely help keep the reader hooked --- I hope you keep a good routine going forward! With that in mind, you should certainly give this novel a try --- keep up the good work, author!
- Seven_0071yrPosted
To sum it up, in the five chapters that were published, a good quality of writing is perceptible, and it readily contributes to the progress of the story. I liked the way the characters are introduced, and their dialogues that help in the world building and demonstration of the world ranks. As for stability, 5 chapters at once got me, and surely help keep the reader hooked --- I hope you keep a good routine going forward! With that in mind, you should certainly give this novel a try --- keep up the good work, author!
- Seven_0071yrCommentedCh 3 First Impression