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You telling me the MASTERS of the MYSTIC arts are primitive? See this: “The Masters of the Mystic Arts were founded by Agamotto thousands of years ago. Following his discovery of other dimensions, Agamotto found ways to draw power from these alternate universes to create magic spells. Realizing that these dimensions could also present existential threats to Earth, Agamotto established the Masters of the Mystic Arts: a league of sorcerers dedicated to safeguarding the world from extradimensional evil.” The funder is an omnipresent god of the multiverse.
Hope he doesn’t do more damage than what he already did. Neither version of Asia deserves any more suffering. Across the Kaleidoscope everything that is possible or impossible is supposed to exist. He is crazy for blaming the MC about dating Rias and Sona in an alternative universe to his original.
Shinobi would be the most effective with hit and run tactics. It doesn’t make sense to move a big slow force that can be targeted by a small force with strong ninjutsu. Small fast mobile units like sand is doing right now should be the most effective.
Thanks for the story i love it and its awesome. He should definitely travel to other universes but my recommendation would be to make some restrictions on the method of travel and to keep in mind the differences in metaphysics and universes universal laws. Also, If he travels to other universes it should be short trips because otherwise you would lose the cohesion of the story (the character and the plot are focused on the DC universe so changing to much the focus would be incoherent) Im going to recommend universes with low average power levels because the MC is still street level. Universes recommend: Harry Potter because he can get Magic books, magic items and magic creatures. Pokemon because he can get friends in Pokemon for the rest of eternity, and what better than a pet companion to recover from trauma? HxH for adventure and experience.
I wont say this fanfic is perfect because it has some problems the main one being grammar, the story needs an editor to correct all the mistakes because there are a lot of them and the problem its recurring. Other than that i cant complain the story is good and unique with good comedy and i hope that any hater comments don’t make you drop it. People will complain but its your story and i like all of it.
Power is important just for living in the Naruto world. You don’t need a reason because its that fundamental. But the MC need a reason to live, he is just going around following the current and the development of his skills. He needs friends, future lovers, rivals. All of them or some of them but until now he is more of a robot than a person.
“Fate” lore and metaphysics are way too complicated and nonsensical. If you want to make a good fanfic of “fate” more so in the age of gods you need to understand the philosophical background of the world. I recommend reading “AGE OF WILL EARLY ACCESS ” if you want to see how complicated it is.
You are downplaying magic a lot. Yeah the MC has all kind of powers with esoteric effects but not one power can be as versatile as magic, maybe he needs more characters with different magic systems to assimilate but magic in some settings like devils of dxd can do anything, even just marvel mystic arts are powerful and versatile. In the higher levels of any versatile magic system on top of versatility you also have conceptual powers. For example illusion magic in the basic level is just a useful trick or a powerful weapon but nothing a lot of powers can’t replicate but in the higher level of illusion magic it’s supposed to trick the world itself and it could be a form of reality warping.