See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

I find the story interesting but there are loopholes in the plot that doesn't make sense. if she knew how to fight & be a strong character she wouldn't act cowardly in front of other people. why let those people run over u like that. not believable. the back story needs more details. no point in revenge if ur the one to let them walk over u like a coward u shown them.

are u sure he is 4 & not 14? he acts like a rebellious teenager!!!

incarnate should be incinerate means to burn it. please watch your language usage. you are still using taught instead of thought. rase is not a word. it should be race.

meat is animal food we eat MEET is to see someone or some things

taught should be thought. that is to think. the word taught is to teach. please watch your grammar & verbiage. you have used it wrongly alot.