batuhan

ah, our friendly neighbourhood reality-warper using "what-aboutism" to warp the arguements. So proud :*)

:D

lol

The sentence is weird

is this translation?

Should be the opposite. Doesn’t make sense

You keep using contrasting words together. If you use ‘even’ then you don’t need ‘but’ again. Again you used ‘nevertheless’ and ‘but’ that doesn’t make sense

it is like AI written repetative descriptions.

I'm not down about MC's character but the process. He started this whole murderhobo thing for nonsense reason that hardly convince the reader. His whole "war" is a lie he strongly believes. And then he spares Margery again for some nonsense reason. The writing and system is nice. I love the touch of paganism and rituels. Author should slowly let MC explore himself and the rituels instead of turning it into "bombing things". Overall, I believe the same story would be much more better in mooore slow-paced settings. The current way is simply "bashing" story that happens suddenly which leaves MC one-dimensional while background doesn't even exist.

this was very forced plot. It would be more thrilling to make things slower. Half of the readers couldn't find an error in Ned because of the pace.