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The fight I say he could of gotten off a bit better but I understand he probably has never fought before so I can’t really complain Here’s some examples for future fights for tricks he could pull I know you said he can’t freeze people cause of magic resistance but he could freeze the air around them to slow them to get up close to fry them another thing you could do is freeze the air if a foe is approaching to pierce through them using there own speed also he could also splash water around instead of ice to increase his lightning for a suprise attack
Let’s go full crafter mode here use every single part of there body flesh and muscle for holy based effect to are potions blood to increase the power of healing potion using the concept power of a child of gods blood of course angles aren’t exactly god child so much as his creation but still then for all the wings I’d use two sets for potions and such and the other two to invest into crafting seeing if we could make a magic bow cloak or just wings for are own use
Why not enchant or combine earth magic with explosion magic to make landmines or gernades
Then you could branch it out even better via adding variables like temperature and such to turn it into a possible high damaging attack which burn what ever it hits without leaving the damage of a fire ball would probably be cheaper to use also considering he can use the ground and dirt as materials it’s as simple as just slightly altering and objects chemical formula to form a type of metal
Here’s the real question why not make a metal arrow or something he can already make spikes
The mc should buy Aura from rwby to give him a extra form of defense and possibly a realy broken power heck it might help with the Longinus and it souls It would also improve the quality of his chakra a bit probably that it make it easier to control or mold
From what I remmber the reason that akuja is his enemy is because he believes akuja is the one who trapped him in the game because akuja is developing something using what he knows of innovative clear and rating games to make a pocket world kinda deal for devils to train without worry
My friend I’m happy to tell you all you need to know so Mitsuya kanzaki is from the story denpachi Where he gets pulled into a type of death game called innovate where your phones equal your lives with them being used to keep you alive and also fight via a form of combat called denpachi where a person would type out a form of code onto there phone which produces a unique phenomenon mitsuya is a class called sword knight with there’s special ability being to harden anything to be as sharp as a sword which he uses to turn his belt into a sword At the end of the one shot denpachi it is left with the readers believing mitsuya is aiming to get to level 100 and gaining freedom from the death games which I believe also results in him gaining the second sacred gear of his being innovative clear which also provides him with the powers of the other classes I believe heres my personal notes on each of the classes also Sword knight: can harden any object to become a sword or armor but consumes battery/energy over time Mage: is able to conjure and manipulate elements at the cost of battery/energy may have possible enchantment powers based off cover of the heroines weapon Support magic is possible and other magic can be used affter casting a support one It is possible to produce magical items or enhance the concept of items at least and example of this is the healing cold pads Reviving people is not possible Only seem to be able to control earth Fire and Water/ice They can also use something called searching magic to find stuff or locations They also have healing magic Hunter: gains enhanced vision also gains the power to increase the power of anything which leaves there hands some examples being a arrow and a water gun,cds Fighter: increase the offensive and defensive power of one’s own body. Class activation requirements: They must type or write out the effect they want to produce Also they may set up short cuts to performing such actions such as setting the leter B to always enact the effect of harderning a belt into a sword
Dang, I think this author has no idea how to do this authoring thing, like who only wrote 1.5k words for their first chapter. That's like a total amateur move there. Don't you know you need to write at least 10k words for your first chapter if you want to hook your audience? What kind of author only posts one chapter for the very debut of their story? God, guys, you should not read this guy's work, for god sake. I looked up his author names and got many failed works. And who in the world even likes barghest? She is like the worst-looking servant out of all of fate. Gilles, in his caster form, looks better than Barghest, and let's not even go over how, so clearly, he just had an AI make his book cover and couldn't even bother to hire an actual artist, dude. You're taking people's jobs from them. You know I can not keep going on about all this crap this dontenglish guy is doing wrong. I'm out of here.
Nice picture