Dear Author you may find this review unreasonable and in that case you are right. How should i evaluate your work if i haven’t read anything of it. And to that i say screw you i will treat your novel like you treat your chapters. Without any respect. If you dont value the rules of this platform don’t expect others to do better. This might turn out to be the best novel ever or maybe the worst but i can’t tell because you did not even write 2000 words so how am i supposed to rate it. On a different tone i wish you the best of luck and hope that you can complete the word count without relying on this damned method. At that point i will delete my review.

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This Chapter was not really in sync with the rest of what quinn has shown so far. Still had fun reading it keep it up

Is not in Character why would someone who builds a connection based network just burn bridge’s. With someone who has a good network

This is not in Character even if you copied it from the book. Slughoorn saw Quinn hugging Marcus so it does not make sense dor Slughoorn to just drop Marcus. If he wants to be on good terms with quinn.

Thats nearly a perfect copy of the book chapter …

I think it's mostly my poor upload schedule but I think I cover could also help.

Uhh good point i will edit the chapter so the soul gets also destroyed :D

I just got to this feature that is also the reason why I answer this late. Yes he will be famous but for other reasons, so there will be no order of the William in that sense.

I am sorry for the late reply I did not found the time to visit this lovely site. They are the pets of William one is an overly grown Nundu and the other is a crossbreed between a Phoenix and an Occamy.

There it is possible because as of now the story there has no clear finish yet.

The first half of the story is not planned as a harem.

Please let me know what you think feedback is very appreciated. I had planned the prologue like that he would tell his everything and after he did continue with 1st person writing, but it seems no one picked up on that. So wasted effort it seems.

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The prologue is

Well yes that is a good idea but the stone is not yet invented in that point of time.

That was a point I did get. I fixed the paragraph in Chapter 9 to fit the story better. I am sorry if my Story does not fit your taste anymore but I would still like to say my thanks to you for pointing out my ward oversight. I thought of him as a lonely man who was in denial pushing away everything that made him human. With the talk to Hengist I tried to put a focus on that, his suppressed feelings. In retrospective, I should have put a chapter in between that to point that out further, maybe ill do that even now. I see the coming chapters as the first real character development. I still wish you the best of luck finding stories that might suit your taste.

Well yes and no I guess while I can see your point that it seems weak that he can't defeat a lethifold, one has to note that the lethifold, like the dementhor are the only amortal creatures in the Potterverse they cannot be killed and even back in the books there was just one wizard that had survived a lethifold attack. So I think the feat of killing one, even with help is commendable. Maybe I should have pointed out the horrors that these creatures are in the Potterverse. I will keep that in mind if a similar thing should happen again.

Thank you for your cheering I read every comment and readers like you let me appreciate writing even more.

Maybe I worded that poorly, he just thought of them like weird dressing freaks he couldn't tell it was the Harry Potter Universe at that time.