I found the beginning strange because I was sure I knew this introduction to chapter 1. and then I was sure it was a copy, I don't remember the name for sure but the work from which it is "copied" has 280 chapters... it may not be fully copied, but it doesn't matter. (even the system is the same, "points of strength")

to the author: you use a lot of "slang" and the grammar is not the best. (not a criticism...) if you improve your grammar and know how to better express your ideas, it will be great. thanks for the chapter.

very good grammar level. where can i read more? mtl? . . ..... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

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the story is very interesting, but the grammar doesn't help... you can hardly understand it. .

Brasil? Carai mano, que raro. Boa sorte aí mn, espero que você termine a ff pelo menos. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . .. . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . PE

true, but sooner or later he was going to make it, because he was going to get stronger and stronger. but if the cards don't have limitations he will reach a level where he can make a card that gives permanent increase of powers like, "strength, speed, intelligence, etc."

I think you should make limitations to the cards, because if not he could write "revive" and the person would revive, or write "improve strength/speed" or even curse enemies, it would be very op. thanks for the chapter!!

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my opinion... the dialogue is extremely awkward to read, the character interactions are too extravagant or taken out of context. as well as writing.

the grammar has improved, I think...

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More chapter? 😁