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TatsuyaShiiba

TatsuyaShiiba

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2019-07-18 JoinedGlobal
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    The quality of this novel has been dropping for the last few chapters... It is slowly becoming unreadable, and just awkward to read for me. the conversations seem unnatural, the situations are forced... It started out great, but I don't like the direction where this is going at all.

    'What's the matter my lady? Do you by any chance not like it? We could always look for something else...or maybe..." Duncan was interrupted by Lord Stark.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    Your, ponctuation is, horrible, man.😂 Seriously though, You're over-ponctuating and my brain gets all messed up while reading the sentences.

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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    No... Now it ends. sorry, couldn't help myself

    ‘And now it begins…’
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Replied to TheLonelyGod

    Do you have any scientific proof to backup your claims about the possibility of Wandless magic? Since you don't, accept that it just isnt that easy for human wizard to do so. you example is the same as saying : since birds can easily fly with their wings, why ddont we just grow a pair of wings and do the same? we eventually did, but by using other tools in the process, namely "airplanes"... the wand has the same story.

    It was a good thing that he always kept a dozen spare wands on himself at all times.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Replied to iTz_Hades

    In fanfictions, it is very common for Ginny Weasley to use love potions to get together with him, as it is somehow a plot made by Molly, her mother. Apparently, it's because Molly admitted to having used it once ( in the books ).

    "Keep up your studies Domeric. You're a smart lad." Maester Wolkan said with a smile, the loyalty compulsion charm subtly making him more truthful and loyal to him.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    I'm not surprised. Well, at least I tried...

    After knowing this his Aunt May who got married to his lover after Ben's death throw him out of Home while saying he is useless now.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    ii'm pretty sure more than 50% of your audience drops this novel because of this chapter( as I did a few days ago ), so I'd suggest you take more time to work on this chapter, or If you ddont want to mention his past, just make him suddenly wake up in his new life. The way you started it just shows that you weren't even trying, and if the very first chapter is just a summary ( and a very bad one at that ), it says a lot about how the next chapters' quality is going to be.

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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    Severus is a 13-14 years old teenager. Dumbledore is a 100+ old, extremely powerful and wise. I hate FFs that portray him as a manipulative idiot. and to be frank with you, that is exactly what you've done here. nothing about this conversation felt natural, not that your grammar and vocabulary helped ( not that I really care, mind you, as its still somewhat acceptable), but the content was really out of place. It is wrong on so many levels it would take some time list them all. Now I understand you'd want to make your MC look smart and act cool. But it shouldn't come at the cost of other characters. Don't make them dumb just to make him look smart i mean. speaking of which, you've done the same with the marauders. James and Sirius were bullies, and I hate them very much. But they weren't exactly idiots. ( at least most of the time ) I mean James himself was a Transfiguration prodigy. But here they are acting with the maturity of a 6 years old.

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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    that's the author whispering things to you to guide you in his plot 👀

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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Posted

    I'm giving 5 stars just because it's a Snily FF. I've been wanting to write a SI Severus for a while myself. ( though this is not a SI ) I'll write a proper review when I read this.

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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Posted

    if you are a HXH fan, give this a shot. You won't regret it. ................................................................................

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    My Researching Journey (HxH)
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    This was an amazing read, Thank you for your efforts! I hope you keep writing !

    Ch 217 Perhaps I can even borrow Its power? For eternity (End)
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    ah... a hero. Should've said so earlier.

    Ever since he saw how Diana tried to protect him despite being in danger herself, his thoughts had been in disarray. He had always wanted to help people, but he never really had any power to do so in the past so he fell to biology, but now that he had the power to, he felt it would be a shame not to use them. And so, he decided he would help them.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    min temp is -273 celsius ( absolute zero ). you cant go lower than that because of what the previous comments said.

    I lowered the temperature on the collar to -300 degrees Celsius. That's below absolute zero. And when most metals are exposed to temperatures of such a degree in either range, they become quite brittle.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    Isn't she speaking japanese though? how can she pop the P :O

    "Nope." Konan popped the 'p'. "She barely reached the middle of the wind zone but even that's already commendable for her age." She distractedly continued but when she saw Tsunade's reproaching look, she frowned. "What... don't give me that look! You are by far the most brutal out of the three of us." She said lazily, making Tsunade lower her head in embarrassment.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Commented

    is this the blue flame from atg ? mix of fire and ice

    Konan's eyes went wide as her mouth opened in 'O' when she saw what he decided to use. The blue flame was similar to mokuton! Merge between katon, suiton, and nature energy as the stabilizer!
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Replied to AS9

    ikr, iits as if everyone in that world is dumb except for the mc. If they're doing it, there is a very good reason for it.

    Alas, they never learned Jutsu for that reason. They refused to learn hand signs. They knew that once they fix it in their brain that they need hand signs and learn to instinctively mold chakra according to them, it would be hard to unlearn it. No matter how big of a crutch they were. Rei could compare them to a wand for wizards in Potterverse. It was easy to learn them and their bodies got quickly used to them. But it was insanely hard to start molding the chakra consciously on your own once you did get used to them.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Replied to Acsmaster007

    I will in a few days, actually xD I know I've been delaying this, but I had my reasons, sorry :3

    "You mean their target was among the spectators?" she said with wide eyes. That was ridiculous. What kind of idiot would hide there among students, with a horde of dementors after him. She knew he was innocent of 'betraying the potters', so it didn't make much sense. Unless he was that kind of idiot that would endanger hundreds of helpless students just to see his 'godson' play Quidditch.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Replied to IAmNumber5

    It's irrelevant as you are reading a fanfiction. I'm not sure the true reason they were there, but I think this makes sense for that particular event

    "You mean their target was among the spectators?" she said with wide eyes. That was ridiculous. What kind of idiot would hide there among students, with a horde of dementors after him. She knew he was innocent of 'betraying the potters', so it didn't make much sense. Unless he was that kind of idiot that would endanger hundreds of helpless students just to see his 'godson' play Quidditch.
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  • TatsuyaShiiba
    TatsuyaShiiba2yr
    Replied to Razish

    I'm aware, but I'm avoiding the problem alltogether, i've found a solution to keep time travel reasonable

    The next day, Kaiser woke up early in the morning unable to hold his excitement. He was about to learn how to do magic. MAGIC! That's a dream come true for anyone. For him however, it's not only about being able to do magic. It's the endless possibilities it opens. The broom is the best way to demonstrate this. In order to fly using normal means, it requires an exceedingly complex craft, based on many branches of science. Yet the wizards can somehow make brooms fly. Or apparition and portkeys, the ability to travel long distances instantly, like a wormhole. And time turners! Time travel! Saying he was excited is actually an understatement.
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