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keldarr_02801hCommentedScum of the earth!
A prime example was a 22-year-old guy who ran over a 20-year-old mother and her 3-year-old daughter, killing them both in the process while drunk racing. Yet, because he was very attractive, there was a protest by several women and some men wanting him to be released, because, in their words, he was too beautiful to go to jail.- keldarr_02801dCommented
Just pointing out there are multiple spelling errors here.
In his embrace was a sleeping Ais, who, after defeating Barol yesterday and completing two quests, had returned to Orlare with Ais and Fenn. They arrived late at night and slept through until morning.detailIs It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?Anime & Comics · XElenea - keldarr_02804dCommented
Jesus man you literaly have 2 of the trifecta systems all you missing is the gamer why you crying
Honestly, I was hoping for some powers that could help me... and I got a hemorrhoid ointment and a chat group. - keldarr_02804dCommented
ROFL why do the random panties alwayse come from here rofl
Hestia's Panties (C) - keldarr_02805dCommented
I have only done that if it’s blatant and reaccuring other wise I post a simple correction not to be an donkey but to be helpful
Most fanfic authors want to please their readers and write to the whims of the readers. But because of that, their fanfic becomes chaotic since not all readers are of the same mind. Like those who gave me powerstones, they like my fanfic and want more of it. But there are other readers who just read this to pass time and so, when they find a mistake, they demand the author to fix it. - keldarr_02805dCommented
O I understand I tryed and it went nowhere after the third chapter I hit major writers block it sucke still can’t figure out how to proceed.
Psh! As if it was that easy to write. It's easy to read since even kids can do it, but write, bruh I won't tell you to write a fanfic or anything, but don't just assume it's that easy. - keldarr_02805dCommented
I’m having no problems with the pace tho I would like a bit of action but meh you doing fine and I love to see authors with backbone they keep writing longer. So you do you and I’ll be here reading it!
Second of all, I got a comment from a reader who mentioned that this novel is slow and becoming filler-like (From his words, I'm more on telling and not showing) {If he is reading this, then meh, I don't care}. - keldarr_02806dCommented
They sence the nightmare energy either that or if this was post remnant his aura!
PS: Why did Godzilla and the MUTO look at Devas? Any theories? - keldarr_02806dCommented
WTH why is it censored here and no where else I’m very confused?
Felicia felt weak; she forgot her own rules, forgot the consequences of getting too close to Allen. However, her mind was numb, and she couldn't think of anything other than pushing Allen into a bathroom to have ***. - keldarr_02808dCommented(Yes, readers are killing me about some fan service, go on boy. Make papa proud)
- keldarr_028018dReplied to Ancientdatiost_014
And so much more if she retains all 3 grails.
I want at least one healer in Mc's peerage, probably one worth two pawn pieces. - keldarr_028018dReplied to Canine_9_6438There were only a few days until Raven's 18th birthday. Trigon was going to see if he couldn't soften his daughter up before the events of that day went into motion. Yes, nothing could go wrong with two of his plans combined. It was perfect! After all, Trigon was nothing if not an optimist in the most twisted sense of the word…
- keldarr_028018dCommented
And then Trigon met Mr barkeep heh let’s see what adventures happen next!
There were only a few days until Raven's 18th birthday. Trigon was going to see if he couldn't soften his daughter up before the events of that day went into motion. Yes, nothing could go wrong with two of his plans combined. It was perfect! After all, Trigon was nothing if not an optimist in the most twisted sense of the word… - keldarr_028019dReplied to whitethief274
I’d be surprised if the author even listens.
Voldemort is no different. Sooner or later he will see the back slash of dark magic. - keldarr_028022dCommented
Ok well we the people demand double post then much hahaha
[AN: Sorry for the late chapter today. I forgot to post earlier :/] - keldarr_028023dCommented
Dude it is Slughorn.
Potion masters like Snape and Slug Greenhorn watched intently, they too wanted a sample to test, but seeing the limited potion bottle and the drastically reduced purchasing power of British pure-blood thanks of one greedy mother*cker. They kept quiet, not like they can do anything else. - keldarr_028025dCommented
Puddle
"Thank you, Harry, for taking me flying with you. It was so much fun...after I got over the initial fear of being a splash spot on the ground." she said, kissing his cheek and hugging him. - keldarr_028026dCommented
This isn’t much but just a pointer your grammer needs a bit of work.some words left out some sentences had improper punctuation. I say pointer because the way you wright seems that English isn’t your primary language
What are the things that need to change about this fic? - keldarr_028027dCommented
First mate is a much better way to say it
And one interesting thing to note is that neither of the two accepted the position of Vice-Captain, as they said it should be a position reserved for the future. - keldarr_02801mthCommentedCh 9 Mission