what game is the image from?

it's a great story and it has developed a lot since I first started reading it. definitely think others should give it a read.

thanks for the chap boss

thanks for the chap boss

threw me through a loop for a moment but I think the concept is kinda cool

um, so the first third of the chapter is in another language

thanks for the chapter

ok, first I was confused but after I got through the system explanation I saw how with this there's a good amount of things and directions you can now take this story with the change. hope this story lasts and doesn't get dropped. rooting for ya, Mr. author

I honestly love this book. but I think that if you're getting burnt, then take a step back and write something new, something different to give you a new view. and then after a while, if you find it in you, then try and hop back onto this story. it doesn't need to be a day or a week. I'm saying if your truly tired of the story then stop and go to a new one if it helps. but remember that once and a while look back at your previous unfinished stories and try to see if you can continue it.

thanks for the chapter mate, keep up the good work

yeah I can agree, still makes me chuckle whenever I see them tho lol

thanks for the chapter boss, keep up the good work 👍

love the image, had a chuckle though cause of the arm coming out og his left calf

thanks for the chapter boss, you've been developing this story splendidly so far, the only thing I can think of to help would be maybe considering posting chapter on Sat sun Tues and Thurs so u have more time to work on chapters and maybe make them longer. again though it's your choice and story so do what makes you feel comfortable.

great chapter thanks boss

thanks for the chap boss

thanks for the chap boss, half asleep after work so can't give advice besides keep it up since English is hard rn lol

I'd say catch up to the group and see if you can change anything else about the plot line, but if you don't want to that then you could send him a big game/fictional world like destiny or dc/marvel for instance that way you have a bigger plot line to follow which could give you a bigger arc for the Mc in said worlds, or keep with a few more shorter worlds to build his strength up before doing said bigger titles

I will agree that interactions between characters isn't all that much compared to other stories, but I'm guessing this is only one of your first few attempts at actually writing a full story, so just keep going at your own pace and experiment with different writing styles till you feel comfortable, the more you write the more experience you will get which will improve your quality. your starting off great already. keep up the good work