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I like the story, but if the story intent was to show struggle of MC then it has already been shown enough already. What is your intent for the story author? To show a weak to strong mc, or to show how a cannon fodder survives in this world? If it's the former then this current pace of plot and growth isn't justified. If you make this clear then readers wouldn't expect something else and then feel disappointed later.
Civilian council having access to Ninja movement and ability to restrict Hokage? This sure sounds logical in military dictatorship. đ Well i am tired to complaining about it. This story has too much overdramaticness, unearned emotional talks and too much fanfiction theories. Not fit for me.
Unnecessarily dramatic and over the top. Breeding? CRA? Jesus. Dude you were being meta about fanfic writers being too outlandish in the last chapter, but then you do the crime yourself. It feels like a Code Geass story with that over the top plan of MC rather than Naruto.
This is too melodramatic. Veteran ninjas losing their patience over and over again and MC preaching them life lessons. Hiruzen, Kakashi and now even Hiashi. Yes, Naruto did talk jutsu too in canon, but it felt earned after long fight and struggle. Here MC just preaches. It doesn't feel earned at all, because nothing happened that led to it.
>unlike others his cultivation would get harder and harder Lol what? It's the same for everyone. As he has a big cheat. If he uses it to maximum then he would get faster cultivation. He already has a 340% permanent buff. Why aren't we reading more on how his buffs are affecting his cultivation. .
Have always pushed for 2 main girls with Rias and Akeno, but if there can only be one then Rias would be the obvious choice. Akeno is good too, but she can't compare to Rias. She is also Rias's servent, so her becoming main girl over rias seems counter intuitive.
Her being a lo*li probably gives her a lot of support. Lots of people like that despite the obvious wrongness in it, but it comes with anime so you learn to ignore it. As a character she's is as uninteresting to me as Asia, and Irina are. I also hate lo*li genre in general, and on top of it if you think about it, she's just a little kid with ptsd and other issues. Rather not see her in a harem.
Blame writer for it not Rias you idiot. Why are you getting mad at fictional character? Author wrote it like that because he wanted issei to be the hero for everyone.
Great! Forced inserting of cultivation bull in another story. Nothing can go wrong in writing the most blandest of all fantasies. People like cultivation stories because of their evil character including mc not because of it's a good fantasy.
Well you are trying to take criticism in good way atleast. Yes i do like Harem stories, but this review and that has nothing to do with each other. I am mostly reading Harem stories here because there's nothing good here on this site aside from some good wish fulfilment fanfics. My review shouldn't have forced you to look into my profile. I don't mind it, but after looking at it you think this story not having harem is problem for me? Where did i even say that? All my review talks about is how akward world building, dailouges and characters are. Might be your first story or whatever, so you need to improve the story flow and how information is given to readers, because right now eveything is info dumps. Best wishes to you for future.
Seriously a lot of his potential is being unnecessarily wasted. He could've been increasing a lot faster in hollow world after he got his stealth. This is like everything else in story has become unnecessarily forced. Plot is about to start, and does it make sense for him to complete all his evolutions in 2 yrs while he wasted 10 years as basic hollow?