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not an issue. i really do hope you improve your writing ability. more good storytellers is never a bad thing

Bruh Is this just a naruto clone? Just the first few chapters and you've basically already copied naruto..the grammar itself is lacking, a fair amount of spelling mistakes. The exposition is lacking. The pacing is lacking. All in all, this is mediocre and not up to my tastes

The grammar needs work

why do they need treasures? couldnt they have techniques that will also work albeit they work slower?

shouldnt sovereigns have methods to see through physical objects?

bruh, you couldnt even express some originality in your first chapter. this is disappointing

deon's soul grew stronger? i hope you have an explanation for why this happened