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too many italics

these asterisks * are terrible

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Nah him playing football as like a qb would go crazy. Easy way to build hype around him. Make the team go to state or smthn. Jus not solely because of him, the rest of the team needs to be good to

It's definitely a unique idea that's implemented very well. I'm really sad it doesn't have more chapters and looks to have slow updates.

don't use the ** actions

Gald your back

do not use mum.

don't use parentheses, use a comma or something here