Je te disais de pas le rendre tros OP tros vite et tros facilement sinon sa sera pas intéressant a lire

I love it, can't wait to read more and please don't make the same mistake as the others by making it hope very quickly and very easily after it is no longer interesting to read

I would have found it more interesting if it had been at the end of the chapter each time after a henchman spoke as a bonus

j'aurai trouver sa plus intéressant si sa avai ete an fin de chapitre a chaque fois apre q'un homme de main lui an est parler comme bonus

I like this fanfiction, it reminds me of the one with Alexander Harris when he is in DC he even does the villains in another way and how he did it wrong

great story I'll look forward to the rest but don't make the same mistake as the other years make your mc too powerful sooner or later it won't be fun to read if after ten chapters he just sneezed to beat it's opposing if you see what I mean and you could make it go into the legends

how are you going to create the supernatural world in himym and what is going to change in the story especially and his relationship with women because he is the best character in the series

it's a bit stupid to remove him from Hogwarts because whether he is there or where he is, we just poison him and if he is at Hogwarts it is Dumbledore who is responsible for the children a slight poison on Draco and he could have had the management of Hogwarts by narcisa seen as lucius and one of the governors of Hogwarts

I like to have where to go and say what's your cover? I can't remember

maybe then not just keep drago who would have given him a pass until the majority of drago on the chests of malfoi and in harry potter a woman who is zabini to the 7 husband and each time she has the chests after their death

so yes as a shield I understand but she should no longer try to get on Rigel's side since he is showing competence with what he knew during their interaction he succeeded in foiling his plan and to resist it is charm

ok I see but if she had had an accident and would have been a widow that would have given her total control over the house malfaith and the education of her son who would have been more like her the only thing that can be it is worn hat

I don't want to be mean but seeing how you made Narcissa a very strategic woman like what she does with Lucius and Drago they are mediocre and don't bring me love because a woman who can make plans like her would look for more one equal to mediocre ones like Draco and Lucius

Minerva

Narcisa

I love this story but I tell myself that the universe of Spartacus with the gladiators and everything would also not be bad as a story especially if it has the quality of this one with the plot and everything

The classic otome dori. also Ryoujoku Famiresu Choukyou Menu. that of terasu mc Kokujin no Tenkousei NTR ru. And ai-kyan

I would like to see the fight against the dragon and especially that it is the goblins or the goblin king who is there to bet and to observe an ancient enemy it could be interesting as with the bank

Wonderful and can't wait to see when he does leviosa devan hermione and what say liviosa not levioso

You could meter it in the comments because personally in the chapter I don't have the images that appear so in the comments at least you can be the world to me and not for more precision