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chrispyappetizer

chrispyappetizer

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2019-05-30 JoinedUnited States
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    This story is unlike the others on this platform. The story genuinely has good development, characters aren't brainless and stay consistent to their character while developing further. Writing quality: Fantastic writing style, at least it appeals to me. There are a lot of grammar/spelling errors but not to the point of it being unreadable. I enjoy the description of the baseball games, the characters, and everything that make the story more realistic. Stability of updates: Only fear I have is that the author will get tired of writing, or quality drops as we reach further chapters. Otherwise, I think updates seem to be stable from what I can see. Story development: The progression of the story is so satisfying, and isn't rushed. The development of the characters in line with the timeline of the story is very realistic, and definitely has constant progression. I never thought a baseball novel would ever suck me in so much, even though I've never watched nor played baseball. Character design: The characters are so realistic I can almost predict what they're going to do/say sometimes. They're consistent, but also show development as it progresses, through slight personality changes, and better decision making as time passes. The conversations are smooth and add to the story really well. World Background: The setting is pretty well described, even side characters are given a decent bit of description. The only thing is the current world in the story isn't described as much, and sometimes setting details are skipped a little bit. Not too important to the story, but with those details i think the story could go from amazing to masterpiece. For example, stadiums aren't described as much, nor are the physical characteristics of characters described in good detail, but the lack thereof doesn't turn me off nor cause confusion in the story. It'd be cool to have more imagery for the physical characteristics of the characters though! It would definitely allow for a better reading experience. Thanks so much for writing this story. I'm surprised to find a good story on here. On webnovel, everything seems to be cliche and filled with a lot of trash writing, and I yet happened upon this gem. Keep writing! I definitely enjoy your writing style, and I am excited to see you improve as time passes. Work on your imagery and more detailed parts of the settings and characters, and the story will pop out even more. I'm excited to see you write other stories as well :)

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