I liked the setup of the story and the mysteries involving Hirow. I'm definitely curious about how everything will turn out. One thing I will note is that the chapter needs a bit more editing, whether it be in sentence structure or grammar. I'm not sure I really relate to Hirow either, since I don't know much about him beyond the little introductions included. I think a bit more characterization and world development (without being too info-dumpy!) would be a good direction. Overall, I like the potential!

Thanks for the review. :) I try my best, and I hope I will continue to meet your expectations!