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RD_Villam

RD_Villam

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Follow the rest of my stories on Royal Road & Scribble Hub: campsite.bio/rdvillam | Instagram: rdvillam20 | Twitter: rdvillam

2019-05-26 JoinedIndonesia
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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Replied to AlverSomyer

    Thank you for your review. :)

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    Northmen Saga
    Fantasy · RD_Villam
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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Replied to Lancee

    Thanks for the review.

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    Northmen Saga
    Fantasy · RD_Villam
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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Replied to katherinelarson_

    Thanks for the review.

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    Northmen Saga
    Fantasy · RD_Villam
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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Posted

    The opening scene still needs to be improved with additional narration or descriptions so that it can be clearer to the reader what really happened. At this time it is still confusing. But after that, the story goes smoothly. The characters are interesting and the background is unlocked little by little. I was able to read the first five chapters quickly. It's an interesting spy-action story full of potential. Keep up the good work.

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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Replied to Jonas321

    Thank you so much for your review.

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    Northmen Saga
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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Posted

    Hi. Since this is just the beginning of the story, I can't really rate it too much. But if I may give a little advice, I think the writing style is a bit confusing. The grammar still needs to be checked, and some sentences, especially the long ones, need to be cut into shorter sentences so that they can be better understood by the readers. The tempo and scene switching is also a bit too fast. Some parts need narration and description here and there so that the atmosphere can be felt better. However, the theme of this detective murder story is quite interesting and has potential. Keep on with it and make it better.

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    Necromancer Mage
    Fantasy · Jonas321
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  • RD_Villam
    RD_Villam2yr
    Commented

    A bit confusing but also interesting.

    Ch 1 Love is not dying.
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    Morphing Iniquity
    Teen · Tailrs ink
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