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I'm new to this so maybe I'll screw it up. I read a lot, I like coffee and I am a very boring person most of the time
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Friend, I have a question. Are you posting the fanfiction.net story here? because if you are simply taking inspiration from it then you are doing it very badly, until now paragraph by paragraph it is the same, nothing has changed with respect to the original story, not even the dialogues. All you've done is change the main character's name from Aaron to Alex. What have you done new with this? I don't understand.
I think your story is good and has a lot of potential, however, I cannot help but give you a small critique that might help you improve your writing. 1: Don't overly detail the emotions of the characters. In one paragraph, you repeated several times that the woman knew how beautiful she was and was surprised that the man wasn't paying attention to her. 2: Your narration is a bit deficient in some aspects. I'm not sure if it's written in first or third person or if it's an omniscient narrator. 3: The dialogue feels very artificial, as if they were generated by an AI, lacking any soul. It doesn't even seem like people are talking. Lastly, I would recommend showing, not telling, improving descriptions, detailing environments more, and ensuring your characters remain consistent with their personalities previously shown. Keep going with your story, I think it has a lot of potential. Just try to improve as these are some errors that I also have and try to solve.
This is not mine but I think it shows what Elizabeth would be like but imagine the honey colored eyes
It's just DC, I don't think they have the ability to crossover with those two behemoths, too much work.
Hello friend, I hope you can answer my question as I have had this in mind for a while. How do you manage to give that sense of divinity and solemnity in the gods of your stories? Do you have a writing process that you lean on? Seriously, you have a great way of writing these kind of cosmic fantasy stories, I envy you. Postscript: You should write a novel.