VladCTan

THX for the chapter

TFTC

Thx for the chapter.

TFTC

TFTC

TFTC

TFTC

I usually just skip harem, but was in the mood for a Hyuga fanfic. Feel bad that I cant give this a better score, it does some things really well, clearly a lot of thought was put in the story, the lore expansions generally make sense and show that the writer understands more obscure lore details well. The political conflict in Konoha is cool and no one seems to be portrayed as an incompetent parody of themselves. The story was at its best when the various factions were planning and negotiating. Hokage faction versus Clan faction trying to outmaneuver each other and gain strength. Unfortunately, the are significant issues(spoilers bellow): -harem, in over 95% of stories it is cringe and does not fit the setting, not a big element for now, but 2 haremets are shaping up, Hyuga and Uchiha girls. Can't be too harsh here, since I read despite seeing the tag ,but cheapens everything it touches. -pace issues, sometimes there are entire lore paragraphs that discuss lore or bring extra explanations that completely break the flow of scenes .I actually like many of the ideas but they do break the flow. -mist jinchuriki fight and everything after in that arc , way to easy gigantic win with no sacrifices(just this win theoretically crippled Kiri forever), very easy alliance with the bloodline rebels, easily getting to the main Land of Water unopposed and now protag most likely to soon to kill the mizukage. Made Kiri in a joke.

Systems always make a story worse.