Xerstoren

Overall a good fanfic. The characters are well build (Although there's a clear bias for the females) and their interactions ain't weird. Though there's a clear lack of description of their appareances that need to be adressed if the author is thinking on adding more characters later on. The main cast is believable in their context as they fit with the image you may have of saiyans. The world building is okay, it could improve with more rich and livelier details in the description but I can understand that the author, just like myself, don't have english as his first language. There's something that need to be adressed as the atmosphere in the novel isn't grim dark enough. Which is the characteristic seal of warhammer. The update rate is good, which is something I would've wished to had to before (Sorry if there's any reader of my FF, I promise I'll finish them) Now something that really bothered me is that at some point in the novel is clear that either the author rushed or something happened. They way that the novel was heading it was clear that the main cast childhood would've be expanded. This would have been great since a lot of characters in the novel could have shared more spotlight while also adding more difficulty to the Saiyans path. This would have given other saiyans more chances to be in the spotlight and further develop their personalities for us the readers to empathise or hate. While also giving more world buildings to their planet. Something I would recommend the author, it's for showing more what is going on instead of telling. Those actions, conversations and interactions shouldn't be wasted by just passing by in some paragraphs, but further develop and show us the readers. Although it's a more personal recommendation since I love slice of life. Overall, is a solid read among the sea of crap that is the fanfiction zone currently. Although it has it weakness such as the clear lack of deepness into the lore of Warhammer, its nothing too serious to affect the read. Although I would recommend the author to get his ass to work and read what is needed since id the plot thickens, so should be his knowledge. And for those that reached here, and still have some doubts or concerns, just give it a try and see it for yourself, trust me you won't immediately quit after the first chapter. That's all I think, have a good night and cya!

Yes, but it's more fit to call him a Pariah since the effect he had is way stronger than what could a simple Blank could produce.

Part of him is a Pariah.

Yes.

that was pretty much their formation, and yep those cannibals were part from the cannibal expansion mod.

Yeah, pretty much.

Although I have an idea of what I would like as the Nation Name, I'm open to ideas if they are better. And about the clans, well, they need some rename before even trying to adopt their clan names (I've already spoiled in the characters sheet)

After finishing with an initial assessment on the novel, here's my review so far till the latest chapter (8) Grammatically I can't say anything since I suck on the matter and can only complain in works that are out of MTL or Google translate. If your English sucks as much as mine, then you wouldn't have any problem with this novel, it's completely readable and I believe it has good grammar, I don't know to be honest. Then we'll go on the novel pacing; thus far has been great! It never felt rush and the length of each chapters leaves enough room for the author to keep you satisfied at the end of it, only those greedy that wished to rush chapter after chapter would find a complain in that regard. 5/5 in that regard. - Characters; So far they were well depicted, maybe the MC wouldn't be cup of tea from the edgy lord's that seemed to abound this app, but I reckon everyone will be satisfied with him. You can clearly understand that the lad is simple minded, although it has been implied he's a man of culture, it's too early to properly judge in that aspect. Sabine thus far has been perfectly wife material and it's honour me to says that between the various waifus on this site, she's around the top. [Personal rant; Btw I wish my girlfriend was a sister of battle too, but I guess not everyone could be so lucky as the MC] The other minor characters has also been well portrayed and you can imagine them existing in the world depicted by the author. In characters regards I say 4.5/5. not five because I feel envy of the mc. - World building; thus far there isn't too much in this aspect since is well too early in the novel to say something about it, though I have to say that it does feels like it's a novel in Warhammer, the vibes are there, the feeling that something bigger is going on could be felt, and more importantly, the feeling that this should get a happy feeling is there too. Though I really hope this doesn't end like your common Warhammer story. With something tragical in between. 4/5 in this regard, we shall see in the future. Nonetheless, for the fellow degenerates members of the Adeptus Mechanicum, it seems like there will be a slight harem, though is heavily implied that the main girl and the one mc will be spending his last days will be with Sabine, I have raised my expectations to see him plowing some bunny in the future. That's all I have to report to you my fellow brothers, see you in another Warhammer work in the future!

Asa