TheViking5500
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saw your request on the forum so I came and checked your story out. It's not bad although, some things like in the description and first chapters are quite confusing. Maybe I would recommend and see if you could formulate your description and sentences a bit differently it would be a massive improvement. Other than that the story has an interesting concept and if you develop it further the story may become potentially really be good. But as said the way some sentences and things are described need to be fixed, otherwise there is just too much confusion in my opinion. If you don't use it already, I would recommend you use grammarly. it has a free version and is very helpful
True lol forgot about that as I was reading the novel
thanks